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"an expert at housekeeping" - Dear my roommate - Stanford supp


jjcorea 1 / 2  
Dec 29, 2010   #1
Hi, thank you for clicking this thread!

please fix my grammar!

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Dear my roommate

My rommie, it's my honor to write a letter. In this letter, I will briefly introduce myself to you. So here are my good's and bad's. Let's start off with my good's.

Living apart with my parents for five years, I became an expert at housekeeping. Since I am a good cook, I will try my best to make every dish you would want. (My specialty is Bibimbob) While I was cooking, I naturally became good at dishwashing and recycling, too. Leave all the room maintenance on me!

Because I lived in many places, I'm good at adjusting to a new environment. I like listening to from heavy rock to country music, and I like watching from romance to action movies, so you decide the genre. I will promise you that I will adapt well with you, so there will be minimal conflict between us. I will strive hard to learn about you.

Since I'm originally from Korea, I'm eager to introduce you the Korean cultures. I will make you Korean food, and let us watch Korean movies, Korean TV shows, and listen to Korean music... you name it! Also, if you are interested in learning Korean, let us watch the tutorial videos that I've made on YouTube. I'll assist you in every possible way. And I want to learn about your culture, too.

I've listed a good side of me so far, and now I will tell you my bad side. Trust me; they are not as bad as you are thinking.

I'm always curious. I'm pretty sure I will ask you a lot of random questions. "Hey, why do humans walk on two feet?" "Hey, why can't we control hiccups?" "Hey, what's your favorite smell?" Even if this bothers you, please bare with that.

Moreover, I need to learn and experience a lot. Perhaps it's because I was only exposed to the Korean culture. So it's difficult to say that I know the American culture. I wish I could make good macaronis & cheese and could understand American jokes on comedy shows. I want to bungi jump, scuba dive, sky dive, and surf. Will you be my mentor?

Lastly, it's sad, but I've never gone out of my town. Therefore what I want to do in college is to travel a lot with my rommie-you. If you don't mind, please be my American tour guide. If it is possible for you, I want you to go to Europe with me one day, and if you prefer, we can visit Korea together! I can be your special tour guide. For you, it's free!

Until September,
Jay
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Aleage12 3 / 27  
Dec 29, 2010   #2
Dear my roommate
so here are my good's and bads..here are my good's (<---- not trying to be mean, but this is a weak sentence)

just start with what you want to say
I have lived apartwithfrom my parents for five years, I becameso I have become an expert at housekeeping.
Leave all the room maintenance onto me!
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in every possible way. And I want , and I want
to say that I don't know the American culture.
macaronis & cheese

I like it a lot - it makes you sound fun and willing to learn
hope my suggestions help - good luck! - I am working on that essay now- hope we both get in :)
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Jan 20, 2011   #3
Hi, thank you for clicking this thread!

please fix my grammar!

Haha, that is cute. You are a natural at online communication, and I think you should visit tengoldenrules.com to start your career as a self-made millionaire getting passive income from selling automatic products online.

My rommie, it's my honor to write a letter. In this letter, I will briefly introduce myself to you. So here are my good's and bad's. Let's start off with my good's.

Perfect! It's lively and interesting.

"Hey, why do humans walk on two feet?"

It's because we evolved opposing digits on out hands, so we learned to stand with the two limbs that lack opposing digits.

Wow,anyone will be lucky to have you as a roommate. I know you probably sent this in already, so I am sorry I did not get to help, but I'll try to be faster next time. I think you have something really valuable to offer, and I hope you check out the EssayForum Contributor Page. I wonder how you learned to write sentences with so much energy in them...


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