Extra Curricular ( Common App) 150 Word Response

In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience)(150 words or fewer).

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The environmental club is committed to informing the community of hazardous threats to the environment as well as having weekly local cleanups. I joined the club my sophomore year and often assisted the president planning the agenda for the meetings. My junior year, I was elected as the junior representative. My job was to inform the junior class of any upcoming events and also plan and prepare events for the juniors. I planned a successful beach cleanup where we filled over thirty bags of trash. I was elected president my senior year and it has been the most successful year. I was able to increase membership from twenty to over forty. Since I have joined, I have spent most of my Saturdays cleaning up beaches. I have made an effort to incorporate everyone in the club as equal members of a team, therefore, maximizing our influence in the community.

Edgar, try to describe a specific cleanup that you organized. It is better that you include details about a challenge and how you overcame it.

Let's not be so informal as to drop the word "during" when it is necessary:
I joined the club during my sophomore year and often assisted the president planning the agenda for the meetings. During my junior year, I was elected as the junior representative.

If you don't want to use during twice, replace the second one with the word "in."

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