An exuberant boy - UBC ESSAY - Tell us about who you are

TELL US ABOUT WHO YOU ARE.

HOW WOULD YOUR FAMILY, FRIENDS, AND/OR MEMBERS OF YOUR COMMUNITY DESCRIBE YOU? IF POSSIBLE, PLEASE INCLUDE SOMETHING ABOUT YOURSELF THAT YOU ARE MOST PROUD OF AND WHY.(maximum 250 words)

I am Howlader Mohammad Ibrahim, an exuberant boy who hankers after his dreams. I have always dreamt of being a happy person and if I speak candidly; this dream has been achieved by me so far. I believe that the world can be a better place if everyone is happy. I find happiness when the destitute find a place to live or starving people get some food. That's why I have committed myself to make others happy. My family members describe me as a genial boy who carries their dreams on his shoulder. My younger brother describes me as an elder brother who is solicitous about his welfare. My friends and others describe me as a flamboyant company who is a paragon in terms of friendship and benevolence. I always try to look beyond the imperfections of my life and be happy. And this is the quality of mine that I'm pretty much proud of. I want to fly high towards the sky, shouldering the dreams of my family. I want to spread happiness as much as I can. So I want to explore the world and help the people living in it. As George Sand said - "There is only one happiness in life, to love and be loved." I am nowhere close to my destination till now, but I wish to go there tomorrow. And I swear to myself that no matter what happens, I will not stop until I have this tomorrow.

There is too much reference to "I" in this essay when the question asks about "They or them". How other people view you. Not how you view yourself, thinking that you can fool the reviewer into believing that this is how other people view you. There needs to be a development of the explanation of how others view you. You gave the opinion of others, but no justification as to how you embody these traits. You have to show supporting explanations for each opinion presented. As for the "what you are most proud of" part, being a dreamer is good, but that is not something that most people would consider an achievement to be proud of. Most dreamers get nowhere unless you are truly skilled and lucky. So use a solid reference to something you did which establishes a character trait that you are most proud of, based upon the way other people see you. A collective presentation of an achievement, that summarizes all that others see as your best personal traits would be best.