Here is my essay for FSU, I would really love if you checked for content and grammer-related errors.
Prompt: For almost one hundred years, the Latin words, "Vires, Artes, Mores" have been the guiding philosophy behind Florida State University. Vires signifies strength of all kinds - moral, physical, and intellectual; Artes alludes to the beauty of intellectual pursuits as exemplified in skill, craft, or art; and Mores refers to character, custom, or tradition. Describe how one or more of the values embodied in these concepts are reflected in your life.
Mores refers to the character, custom, or tradition. Mores is a very important part of my life. When I was very young, my mother indoctrinated me in my cultural traditions and customs. One important Indian custom is to always respect your elders. In my tradition, showing disrespect to elders can be interpreted as being ignorant of the elders' knowledge. I have always known to be respectful, and values such as tradition and customs are part of my everyday life.
A important tradition of my family is that one can eat only after taking a shower and praying. I have never eaten before taking a shower or praying and never plan to do so. I have been faced with many temptations to forget my mores and to eat before taking a shower but I have always remained strong and refused to eat. I once went to a sleepover at my cousin's house where his cousins and friends ate without taking a shower but I refused to mimic them. The reason I refused was because of my character - I refused to lie and break my tradition even though my parents weren't present. In my family, honesty and respect is valued the most so it is in my character to hardly tell a lie. That experience made me realize that if I had broken the tradition, I would be cheating no one except myself, I would be essentially lying to myself. Therefore tradition and character are reflected in my life daily.
Vires is another important concept that is reflected in my life. I believe that being physically strong and morally strong are connected, one can be morally strong if he uses his physical strength to make a positive impact in the community. I do volunteer work at a nursing home, my tenure as a volunteer consists of transporting the residents, reading the morning newspaper to them, serving them, and talking to them. My actions have helped me develop morally because I used my physical strength to transport the residents that are in wheelchairs, I have also read the newspapers for the residents that have poor eyesight. For me, moral strength is also connected to mores because I have the strength to not break my tradition and lie. My intellectual strength is best exemplified in school. During school, I have the intellectual strength to obtain knowledge from teachers that I can later apply in my future profession to better help the community.
"Vires, Atres, Mores" are the guiding philosophy of Florida State University, but they have also been the outline of my character. "Mores and Vires" are the two primarily concepts that are reflected in my life and it is my goal to never forget them. I plan to apply these concepts not only at Florida State University, but also in my aspired profession which is to be a family doctor. My profession depends on these concepts, but more importantly, my life reflects these concepts.
"My actions have helped me develop morally because I used my physical strength to transport the residents that are in wheelchairs. I have also read the newspapers for the residents that have poor eyesight. For me, moral strength is also connected to mores because I have the strength to not break my tradition and lie. My intellectual strength is best exemplified in school. During school, I have the intellectual strength to obtain knowledge from teachers that I can later apply in my future profession to better help the community.This section is very disorganized; it seems like ideas you had and just put down; organize and place these individual sentences in areas that are more fitting. For instance, the sentence about breaking your tradition and lying shouldn't be in the paragraph about strength.
"Vires, Atres, Mores"If you are going to place this phrase in quotation marks here you need to do it for every instance of the words throughout the whole essay. are the guiding philosophyYou refer to these three characteristics (plural) and refer to them as "are" (again, plural) and then use the singular form of philosophy. Make sure all of your subjects agree; that is, they are all either singular or plural, not a mixture of both. of Florida State University, but they have also been the outline of my character. "Mores and Vires" are the two primarilyPrimarily what? concepts that are reflected in my life and it is my goal to never forget them."
Your content looks good; you answer the prompt completely with good examples. It needs a bit of work in regards to organization, but once it's been polished it will probably be a pretty good piece.
