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My Family, the most important thing in my life - My First Thread


Ry_CH 1 / 1  
Oct 21, 2010   #1
Hello friends. This is my first post in this website.
I'm from Indonesia, so I can't use English well.
In this website, I want to improve my English.
Please help me to correct my mistake. Thanks !!!

My Family

I live in a very lovely family. I love them all, and I'm proud being one of them. My family consists of 4 people. They are my father, my mother, my brother, and me myself. My father, named Hartanto Hadi Susanto, is an entrepreneur. He sells building material via telephone. Beside being an entrepreneur, he is also a contractor. He builds some buildings, such as houses, shop-houses, and others. My mother, named Lies Cendrawati, is a housewife. She can cook some delicious foods. I think she is more than just a housewife. She can support me and my family to be better and better. I love her more than anything else (=D). My brother, named Elbert Valdian Hardika, is a student. Now he is studying at Bina Nusantara University, Jakarta, Indonesia. He takes Information Technology. He always encourages me for living better too. Although he often has some quarrels with me, I always love him. I can be right here now because of him too. Without my brother, I may be not able to even turn on my computer (=P). He's really worthy for me.

My family is the most important thing in my life. With this family, I know life, I know love, I know care, and I know everything. I hope I can live in this family for a long long time. =DD

Taniad 4 / 15  
Oct 21, 2010   #2
Besides being an entrepreneur, he is also a contractor.

Although he we often has have some quarrels with me, I always love him/I have always loved him.

Now I can be right here because of him too. Without my brother, I may be not might not be able to even turn on my computer (=P).

He's really worthy for of me.
With this family, I know life, I know love, I know care, and I know everything.---maybe I learn life,...
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Oct 25, 2010   #3
They are my father, my mother, my brother, and me myself .

He always encourages me to live better, too.

He's really worthy valuable for me.

It is perfect. I just made some suggestions to maybe make it even better. It is already written with correct English, though!


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