An experience in my life that was significantly meaning to me was the passing of my two sisters in a tragic car accident on their way up to Tallahassee.
That's terrible, Mark, I hope you are taking good care of your parents whenever they are reminded of the tragedy.
Well, you can make this even more powerful (i.e. powerful in the way that a piece of writing can be powerful) if you make it about an experience that occurred as PART of the complexity and pain that followed the tragedy. Do not just refer generally to the tragedy. Zero in on a detail, a particular moment.
That will intensify the whole essay.
Also, why are you telling the details about where they went to school? You should focus on one theme, one message represented by that moment you choose. Think of a profound film, like... Thin Red Line. A work of art, like the film or your essay, should capture one or more moments and use those moments to share a message/lesson.
:-)