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Fashion Business Management - FIT NYC FBM MAJOR UNDERGRADUATE

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Aug 2, 2020   #1
The questions are:

What makes you a perfect candidate for FIT?
Why are you interested in the major you are applied to?

750 Words max

My passion for fashion started with my love for clothes, shoes, purses- anything I could try on and wear. But things shifted, it started to become more than just the clothes it was the story behind them. I once read, "I don't wear outfits, I create looks", it has been my credo every day since. Fashion is more than wearing an outfit, it's a form of art, the look, the feeling it gives you when you put it on, the confidence, the inspiration. Fashion has energy, personality, and aura, it moves at a rapid speed and changes every single day.

Growing up in Los Angeles is hard when you are enamored by a city like New York. LA doesn't have that same swag, attitude and, the fast-paced lifestyle I crave. When it comes to fashion, Angelenos are uninspiring compared to New Yorkers. We have a basic and relaxed style, whereas New Yorkers take pride in their outfit. I've been there twice in my life, and each time I felt like I belonged. I remember walking the streets, inspired by all the outfits that were different from what I was accustomed to. People had real creativity, style, and the ability to express themselves in ways you can't anywhere else. After my first trip to New York, I was determined to come back. That's when I found out about the Fashion Institute of Technology (FIT). I was astonished to find out that there is a school in New York, that's focused on what I want to do. Let alone the exact major, Fashion Business Management(FBM). There is no other place I would rather be getting my education in fashion - the fashion capital of the world.

Fashion Business Management appeals to me because of its challenging and valuable curriculum, especially buying and planning which is what I want to do when I graduate. My ambition is to become a retail buyer for a fashion company. I would love to travel, attending fashion shows in cities like London, Milan, and Paris. I think it'll be an unexplainable feeling walking into a store and seeing the clothes I picked. My goal is to be the best retail buyer the fashion industry has ever seen and I know that going into FBM will help me reach that goal. I have dissected all of the majors at FIT along with its curriculums but nothing piqued my interest like FBM.

In my junior year of high school, I founded the fashion club. We talked fashion news, discussed runways and red carpets, and did projects like creating look books. I was also a part of the Black Student Union which gave me an amazing feeling of unity with my peers. LAGirl Style is the company I am currently working with to help revamp their brand. I've worked alongside the CEO, meeting with whole-sellers, taking part in photoshoots, and doing technical work on social media. Working with this brand has helped solidify what I want to do with my career. It's shown me that I want to be on the business side of fashion rather than design. Also, as a junior, I was accepted to the Fashion Institute of Design and Merchandising for their Merchandising and Marketing major. This was the second most amazing moment in my academic career, but I believe getting into FIT will be the first. I've volunteered at the Ronald McDonald House the past four summers and as well as local homeless shelters through Heavenly Helpers, a non-profit organization in South Central LA. I've recently been inducted to the National Honors Society and was on the Honor Roll at my school for two semesters.

I believe I'm the perfect candidate for FIT because fashion has captivated my imagination every day for years. My father has always told me since I was a young girl, "If you love what you do, you'll never work a day in your life". This is how I feel about a career in the fashion industry. I'm eager to learn and experience things I can only learn or experience at FIT. I have some knowledge in fashion and would love to expand on it in the fashion capital of the world. To be in the city I love so much, surrounded by people who are on a similar path as I am would be the greatest experience. All this to say, I am determined and dedicated to the Fashion Institute of Technology.

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Aug 2, 2020   #2
I am not sure how you will take my review of your essay but I have to tell you the truth. Not all of your paragraphs can be used for this response essay. The last paragraph works well as an introduction. The paragraph previous to that one, holds a good foundation in response to why you are a perfect candidate for FIT. You just have to expand and build on the participation at various organizations as you mentioned in that paragraph. Maybe limit it to the most notable and fashion related ones since that is the major focus of the school. Making those activities more appreciated by the reviewer. The third paragraph also needs to be better developed and presented as a response to the "why this major" question in the prompt. It is too shallow an explanation. Try to give it more depth and substances. Focus on the reasons why you chose fashion business management. relate it to your participation with the LAGirl Style and encounters with the CEO. These adjustments should help your essay become more focused and of interest to the reviewer.

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