"Fashion and writing"
What makes you a perfect candidate for FIT?
Why are you interested in the major you are applying to?
This question has been very hard for me to answer. Only because there are so many reasons why I think I am a suitable fit for FIT. My dedication and commitment to being a Fashion Model and Artist have led me to see things in life differently. The different life experiences that I've been through has pushed me into becoming the best that I can be. The reason I say this is because Fashion and Art have changed me for the better. It has helped me with expressing who I am without words but through my pieces.
During my years of High School, a whole new world was opened up to me that has changed the course of my life forever. Who knew art would turn into my euphoria-causing me to come out like a flourishing butterfly, different from the caterpillar that I once was. Toni Morrison a powerful novelist who inspired me to believe that anything is possible once said, "Life is like water. No matter how much anyone tried to cover it up or build over my dreams, they just came flooding back to the same place in my heart every time and washing the doubt away. When an artist is meant to be an artist, their fate doesn't go away. It comes right back every time". This quote has always inspired me to remember never to doubt myself into becoming who I want to be in life. In the past, I've always been afraid to show my work. I was afraid of what others would say or think. There were times where I wouldn't acknowledge my artwork or say that I created this piece because I was reluctant. One day during my critique in class everyone made a piece of how they felt. Days after critique was completed my professor called me in class to say that he wanted my piece to be presented in our schools Art Gallery. At that moment I was so appalled. That point in time I knew what God had planned for me. Like my father always said, " Everything happens for Reason", and that reason was for me not to be fearful or concerned what others thought of my art because not everyone is going to have something good to say.
I knew Graphic Design would be something that I had the desire to do in life. While putting multiple ideas together to create one piece led me into the direction of wanting to be Visual Graphic Designer. I believe Art can be expressed in many different ways and forms. I've been developing my Graphic Design skills at SUNY Potsdam University over the past two years. I took art courses such as Art History, Drawing 1 and 2, Color & Design, 3 Dimensional Design, and Graphic Design & Media Arts 1. Throughout these courses, I've learned and developed different techniques such as being able to create Spreadsheets for a clothing line called PrettylittleThing. I've had the opportunity of making a logo for Orchestra of Northern New York that was presented in there youth charity. I've also created my own Bo Diddley Magazine an old-school rock musician, to remember his legacy that was featured in my schools' magazine. During the summer I did a freelance job, My duty was to design multiple logo signs for an Auto Shop company. I would take pictures and redesign them on Adobe Photoshop, Illustrator, and Indesign. Applying as a Graphic Design major at FIT can help me continue with my originality. I've been interested in art for as long as I can remember, and have enjoyed studying art and showing my own work in high school and throughout college. I can't think of a better place to pursue a major in Graphic Design than Fashion Institute Of Technology. Not only do the courses sound fascinating, but it is my dream to live so close to great museums and close to home.
Fashion Institute Of Technology is where I believe I can grab people's attention. Applying to this school can assist me in the right direction by achieving my goal of becoming a Visual Graphic Designer. Having lifelong experiences here at Fashion Institute of Technology can help me with being an effective Visual Graphic Designer in the future.Holt Educational Consultant - / 14,835 
4783 Chyna, your first paragraph doesn't really help to move the essay along. It would be best to omit that and instead, open the essay with a presentation of the stand alone quote from the writer in the following format:
"Life is like water. .. It comes right back every time". - Toni Morrison
Then go into the first paragraph by explaining what obstacles you had to overcome in order to get to where you are today. The paragraph about your preparation for the course should be divided into topic paragraphs so that is easier to read and also better formatted towards a quick reference should the reviewer need to do so. Try to better develop the explanations for your preparation by explaining how you hope to use these skills as a student at FIT.
By the way, your final paragraph isn't really as catching as it should be for a closing paragraph. You need to think of either replacing it or finding a way to spice up the presentation to help make your essay more memorable to the reviewer.
