I can't tell whether you've answered the question (and thus whether you've written an effective essay) until I know what the question is
What I can
tell you is that this looks to be about 250 words, which is about a third longer than necessary given that you tend the same things more than once.
Also, there's at least one place where you don't talk about yourself at all:
Where I live now there is a group of people who get together once a week...