My interest in economics started from my parents' electronic components wholesale shop, and was deepened when I could explained their perfectly competitive market with microeconomic modelings.
My interest in economics started from my parents' electronic components wholesale shop, and was deepened when I could
explain their perfectly competitive market with microeconomic modelings.
No other grammar error.
Your essay is good. But I think you did not explain why this school fit you, I mean, you just descried Carleton college and your experience separately.
Maybe you should point out some specific programs which attract you.
Good luck!