Feeling hopeless and scared when no one comes in aid; pivotal moment in my life

*Disclaimer* This essay is about a pivotal moment in my life. Please be edit as harsh as possible. I would like to fix every mistake no matter how minute. Thank you for your help! Great appreciated.

Imagine feeling hopeless and scared when no one comes to your aid. That was how I felt around this time last year. Why was I filled with fear and felt hopelessness? I was told by my school's guidance department that I was not allowed to drop grade twelve Biology because I would not be able to do any better if I retook the course. I was also told that I should reconsider my post-secondary decisions. According to them, I should study a social science or enroll at a college instead of my dream school, University of Toronto. This filled me with anger, but mostly hopelessness; the school and program I wanted to pursue since I was a young child were now out of reach. Every day, I told myself, "If I am allowed to drop the course, I will prove everyone wrong." In the end, after multiple meetings between my parents, the guidance department, vice principals, and me, I was told I was allowed to drop the course. I promised myself that I would disprove everyone's opinion of me and show them that I could achieve my goals and dreams. This decision left a permanent mark on my life.

I was not a great student. In grade eleven, I was taking grade twelve biology and not doing well at all. The mark I received on my midterm left me deeply ashamed of myself. Through my first years of high school (Through Grade 9 to Grade 11) I never had an interest in school, I felt as if school was a chore and did not want to be at school. Due to my lack of enthusiasm in school a habit was formed, I told myself I would do the next year but I never really put in the effort into doing better. I was all talk but no action. It was not until I realized I would not be accepted by any universities with my marks at the current time did I actually put effort into improving myself. After being allowed to drop grade twelve Biology, I took the course in summer school. I spent my entire summer in school (Taking Advanced Functions and Biology). Every single day of summer I told myself I have to prove everyone wrong because I made a promise not only to myself but to the guidance department, vice principals, and my parents that I will prove them wrong if they just gave me the opportunity to succeed by allowing me to drop the course. The transition from slacking off in school to all of a sudden doing well was extremely difficult, many nights I would want to quit and just give up because that was the easy way out. There were many nights that were filled with tears due to the uncertainty of my future. Would I be accepted into university? What if I didn't? What would I do with my life? What is there left for me if I don't get a post-secondary education? These questions filled my mind every moment of my summer, but they were all wiped away by my confidence in myself to prove everyone who didn't believe I had a future wrong. I achieved a mark of 89 in grade twelve Biology at the end of summer.

At the moment I was told I was not allowed to drop the course, I was filled with anger and hatred towards my school. However, reminiscing on this moment, I feel blessed that everyone told me, "You can't." If it was not for them, the non-believers, I would not have been able to achieve the things I have achieved. I would not have been able to apply and be accepted by the University of Toronto with an admission average of 90%. This was a life lesson I will take with me until the day I die, because it was extremely life-altering. Before this turning point of my life, I would wake up everyday without purpose because there was no motivation inside of me and this negatively affected my academics, but after my epiphany I would wake up with one purpose in mind: to prove everyone wrong. And this was all the motivation I needed to steamroll through all adversities I faced while studying. At times, I would be up late in the night studying for a test the next day. I would be tired and want to sleep, but I told myself, "You have to be strong and push on to prove the doubters wrong." This life altering experience not only gave me motivation to do well but it made me mentally strong and tough. I was not afraid to handle any task because I knew I could achieve whatever I wanted to. I knew I just needed the right motivation to achieve everything I had ever dreamed of.

If it had not been for this life turning point in my life, I would have headed down the wrong path of life. I would have likely dropped out of high school because my marks would not have been high enough to be accepted by any post secondary institution. I would have been a disappointment to everyone, but most importantly I would have disappointed myself. I would have missed my opportunity to be successful in life and to prove everyone wrong. Because of this life altering moment in my life, I have just recently been accepted to University of Toronto for their Life Sciences program with an entrance scholarship of $1500 for the first year of my studies. After this moment in my life, I will never allow someone to tell me I can't or I am not qualified to do a specific task. This moment in my life will have an impact on me for the rest of my life.

this sentence is a bit too long isn't it..it would affect the flow of your essay. you could perhaps shorten it into:

Every single day of summer I told myself to put in extra effort because I promised everyone that I would not take the hard-earned opportunity for granted.

good luck :)

Imagine feeling hopeless and scared when you are alone and no one comes in your aid


.... Sounds like you are repeating the same idea.... Better avoid the latter part


.... this is a little bit confusing for me. You were not allowed to drop Biology as well as you were not allowed to re-take? Sounds a bit confusing for me :(


I felt angry, depressed and more than everything I was lost without any hope.