Hey everyone! I am writing this essay on the U of C's topic Find X. LEt me know what you think...it's still a rough draft.
Finding "X" is the means to finding oneself; it involves a introspective journey through the hardships and positive moments of one's life. Though "X" can appear as a challenge we must take into account our life struggles that will prevail ."X" is the unknown, the variable with many solutions, and the 24th letter in the English alphabet. It may stand alone at times, but it becomes stronger because "X" recognizes the bigger picture of life.
The Unknown is everything we think about and dream of knowing, it is "X." "X" is waking up every morning unaware of what the day will behold, but is ready to experience new ideas. Becoming a young adult is a scary thought to me. It required me to consider my career goals and future plans. As I prepare myself for the college application process, there is always the question of "What do you want to be when you grow up?" Many of my peers claim that they have their lives planned out, only do they know that "X" is unexpected. "X" represents the things that one may desire to accomplish in life, however, must be experienced to discover the mysteries. I consider what I would be most successful at and I reflect on what I would be most happy doing--it is a process. I honestly admit that I am afraid of "X" and its aspects of the unknown because one never knows until one gets there. I have to discover and figure it out myself, putting my best foot forward and keeping my head held high. Whatever the unknown is, is anonymous. Therefore, I believe that it is life. Life is sometimes complicated in relations of "X;" it is the driving force that allows oneself to believe the impossible and think the unthinkable.
There are many perspectives and different routes one can take to arrive at her final destination. "X" says that there are no limitations in life. My equation: (insert equation here). This equation has a set focus that can journey as far as "X" would go--the moon is the limit. Even though no two people are alike, sometimes they can reach similar goals because of "X". What I have learned is that people can start out at diverse points and reach the same destinations of ambition and excellence.
What an interesting topic! (infinite possibilities!) Very quick feedback at a first glance:
I was with you for the first paragraph and got lost somewhere towards the second half of the second. The third last para felt/read like it a different essay introducing a new train of thought (an equation.) The last sentence left me up in the air - was this your answer to the prompt "find X?
i dont think u found in your essay! look a bit harder:P A.Smith is rite all three paraz r independnt that is theres no link between em!
This is a kind of run on sentence called a comma splice:
The Unknown is everything we think about and dream of knowing, it is "X." ---Separate it into 2 sentences with a short, 3 word sentence at the end. It is "X."
"X" is waking up every morning unaware of what the day will behold, but is ready to experience new ideas. Wait a minute, now... your wiritng is excellent, but I think you are doing what I sometimes do.. getting logic carried away with the rhythm. I don't know if you can say this about X while also saying it is the true self.
Becoming a young adult is a scary thought to me. It required requires me to consider...---Keep tense consistent if possible.
my career goals and future plans. As I prepare myself for the college application process, there is always the question of "What do you want to be when you grow up?" not a necessary, helpful sentence.
Very clever!---> I honestly admit that I am afraid of "X," ...
It'll be super-effective if you can somehow connect this more strongly to your goals for the future. It is okay to not know yet what you want to do, but... well, no, it really is not okay. You will not be as impressive if you do not expound at least a few goals.
You are a great writer! Be decisive, and tell the reader about some goals.
