- Admission officers know a suck up statement when they read one. Skip this. They already know they have an excellent institution. They want to know about you and your plans for studying there.
- I intend to double major in biology and anthropology. I will do that because I believe that the greatest scientific discoveries all stem from an understanding of the human body and society from past to present. The best scientific minds understand the connection and the evolution of human society with medical science, just like the Odone's did in their own way.
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Specifically, Penn's relationship with the University of Edinburgh in Scotland amazes me as students receive opportunities to study in its biology and genetics programs.
_- I specifically would like to pursue an opportunity to study at the partner school of Penn, the University of Edinburgh in Scotland, where amazing learning opportunities await students in the field of biology and genetics.
Deeply interested Hispanic culture, I plan to minor in Hispanic Studies. Spending seven years with people from across the globe at my summer camp, I couldn't wait to know enough Spanish to hold a conversation with my best friend, Tatiana. The Penn Summer Abroad Program in Madrid interests me as it gives students the opportunity to experience Spanish culture and living as well as learn and perfect the Spanish language. [
/quote]- This is not related nor relevant to your title choice for this essay. Do not include this because it only takes up needed space and deviates from the focus of the essay.
- No relation to the focus of your essay. Unless this was previously required in the prompt?- Don't present new information at the end of your essay. Most specially, do not play the "traditional family school card" because your father's being an alumna of the school will not influence the admission officer or committee. Your academic credentials should speak for yourself. Be fair to the other applicants. Those on the committee who know your father will know you are his child through other aspects of your application. There is no need to point this out.