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A firefighter is as much of a super hero as superman or batman; SUPER HERO


acatam 1 / 4 1  
Dec 31, 2012   #1
Critiques please? :)

If you were a super hero, what would your super power be, why, and for what purposes would you use it?

As far as super heroes are concerned, I don't believe that one needs to have super powers. A firefighter is as much of a super hero as superman or batman, even more so in his own right. Nevertheless, if I were to be a super hero I would prefer the package came with super powers. The box would probably read "Super power: Space/Time Manipulation, useful for saving the world and basic tomfoolery, cape and secret identity not included".

In essence, space/time manipulation would give me the ability to teleport, speed, stop, and slow time, as well as travel through it. All of these qualities are highly practical for everyday life. Running late for work? Just slow down time a bit. Need to write an essay on antebellum south? Travel through time and experience it first-hand. Having the ability to manipulate space and time would be the ultimate super power a person could have. At least, the best super power a student can possess.

Not only would space/time manipulation be useful for conventional problems, it could also help save the world. If the world has decided to bless a poor soul with super powers there are one of two things that can happen, either that person becomes a super villain or a super hero. If neither does, the universe should take their super powers back because it's a waste of super juice. For my chosen super power, becoming a super villain seems much easier to do. Go back in time a little and mess with the present. However, according to popular belief, the universe protects itself, leaving my devious plans to rewrite history in the dust. So then, I would have to rise to the occasion, if it presents itself, and heroically save the world.

Regardless of being a super hero or a super villain this is real life and in real life, there are no super powers. There are super skilled people, and heroes, but not super powered heroes. However that's just fine, super heroes are escapism. Store the super hero package in a closet somewhere for now. When life gets to be too much let us do as Tolkien and escape into fantasy, into the Marvel Universe, or whatever Tumblr has to offer.
dsamps23 - / 6 1  
Dec 31, 2012   #2
As far as super heroes are concerned, I don't believe that one needs to have super powers. A firefighter is as much of a super hero as superman or batman, even more so in his own right.

^^Why include that if that's not what you talk about in your essay?

For my chosen super power, becoming a super villain seems much easier to do. Go back in time a little and mess with the present. However, according to popular belief, the universe protects itself, leaving my devious plans to rewrite history in the dust.

^^This is a little confusing. Are you saying you would rise to the occasion only because the universe would thwart your plans of evil? That doesn't seem like something you want to share about your character...

I love your last sentence--very witty.
jhakyung195 2 / 4 1  
Dec 31, 2012   #3
As far as super heroes are concerned, I don't believe that one needs to have super powers. I find this sentence very awkward. I don't know why but it seems very needless. Especially when it should be the HOOK of your essay. I get that you believe superpowers are not needed but then the first phrase should not be necessary

A firefighter is as much of a super hero as superman or batman, superman and batman should be capitalized. even more so in his own right. you may also want to elaborate this sentence. How is a firefighter just as same as our heroically acclaimed men in capes?

If the world has decided to bless a poor soul with super powers there are one of two things that can happen, either that person becomes a super villain or a super hero. If neither does --> there is a bit of a confusion. you are refering to a single person however neither implies there are more than one , the universe should take their super powers back because it's a waste of super juice how? .

However, according to popular belief, the universe protects itself, leaving my devious plans to rewrite history in the dust. So then, I would have to rise to the occasion, if it presents itself, and heroically save the world.I'm not sure I understand this sentence. What are you trying to say? Are you saying that the universe would do its job to foil your plans? How?

Regardless of being a super hero or a super villain, this is real life and in real life, there are no super powers. There are super skilled people, and heroes, but not super powered heroes. However that's just fine, super heroes are escapism.I'm not sure what this means Store the super hero package in a closet somewhere for now. When life gets to be too much let us do as Tolkien and escape into fantasy, into the Marvel Universe, or whatever Tumblr has to offer.

In all honesty, I enjoyed reading your essay. I like the idea and where you are coming from. However, I feel like it might need a bit of work. Elaboration is key. Also, many of your reasons are very generic. I'm not sure which college this essay is for but if I were an admissions person, I would be expecting a bit more. Space/time manipulation, while that is a great power, I'm sure they've seen hundreds of essays where people, especially students, want to have the ability to control time. But what is UNIQUE about YOURS? A little more elaboration, a little more YOU, a little more connections between ideas, and this would be a fantastic essay :)


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