Essay about my first job at the age of eight and a half

Hi, I was wondering if anyone had time to help me edit my essay. THANK YOU

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While my third grade classmates were deciding whether leaves should be colored orange or green, I was busy deciding which supplier would bring the most profit for my father's construction business. I worked hours every day as a volunteer secretary and interpreter for Vandy's Contractors. My parents struggled with English, so I was responsible for anything involving English. When my parents immigrated over to the United States they were in dire need of a translator, so I took it upon myself to learn Vietnamese and English fluently enough to be able to translate. It may sound like a lot of work for someone so young, but I enjoyed the opportunity to help my parents, and reveled in their praise for my hard work. With the experience I gained, I was then able to act as a translator for the Vietnamese immigrants around the area. Not only was I able to help my own family, but others too! While some may say that an eight year old is too young for such work, I found it rather rewarding.

You have a very unique story! You show off your good qualities by telling the reader all about your childhood. The only thing I might change: in the final two sentences, switch them, so you end the essay in "others too" I think this paper is pretty solid, nice work!

The essay is very good and unique. I would also change the ending a bit.
Another thing if you have characters to spare would be to elaborate more on how it affected you and your character.

Well u have definitely got a unique essay that gives a personal insight into your childhood and experiences...If u do have words to spare i suggest u keep the content u have written till now and just elaborate a bit more on what u have learned from having to enter the "cruel world of industry" (just kidding) at such a young age...other than that it was really interesting to read and has no grammatical or style errors...GOOD LUCK

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nice work!!

Thanks everyone for taking the time to read and edit my essay! I sadly don't have enough characters to add on any more information, but I did switch my last two sentences around. Thank you for the advice too!