I'm assuming that these are simple grammar mistakes because english is not your first language?
initiating Korean seminar, which now composes 15 students
initiating
a Korean seminar, which
is now compose
d of 15 students.
I have also created Vision for North Korea to raise awareness among my peers.
among
st ... maybe? and state what exactly this is raising awareness for
I compose optimism and hope despite the financial and domestic instability of my family. I also compose simple comedy.
I'm not sure what you're trying to say here. the first sentence that i quoted here "I compose optimism..." isn't finished unless you were trying to say, "I'm very optimistic and full of hope depsite the financial..etc. etc." the second sentence can be changed to, "I also love making people laugh."
break awkwardness just by pronouncing
break an awkward situationI am a lover of challenge. Having shortness of breath and weak physique, I joined cross country as a freshman and have been running as a varsity runner since sophomore year.
I love a challengeDespite my shortness of breath and overall weak physique I joined cross country... etc. etc.I spend weeks for an essay for which the native speakers would spend two hours. I have cried and have had bloody nose to maintain good grades at a school full of intelligent Americans. Thirsty for more, I imagine myself at -------.
I spend weeks
on an essay
that would take a native english speaker only two hoursi'm not sure what you're trying to say about the nosebleed, ask a friend that speaks english well
and where do you imagine yourself?
traveled to various nations in my childhood from Singapore and Malaysia to England and Netherlands.
traveled to various nations
during my childhood
such asSingapore, Malaysia, England, and the Netherlandsnow, like I stated before, I assume all of these mistakes are because English is not your native tongue. So if you choose, you don't have to make any of these corrections, but make sure that the admissions office knows that english is not your first language. they will take this into consideration and probably overlook these grammatical mistakes. If you don't want to take the chance, still tell them that english is not your first language but make these changes