A person's background, experiences and activities show diversity. To elaborate, my forte in sciences is reflected through my academic career, meticulous work at a hospital and the research I've done for the past 3 years. Along with my interest in the sciences, my ethnic and cultural background cultivates my distinguished personality. Although I have been raised in the suburbs, traveling abroad has allowed me to experience various unique aspects of the world. It is important to have a community of diverse people in order to collectively alleviate bias we have in society. Therefore, my ethnic and cultural background, as well as my hours of volunteer work, contributes to my distinction in society.
Over the years I volunteered in different locations which have helped me see the world in its brightest and darkest moments. From communities gathering together to help people in need to others suffering without the attention of anyone, everywhere we go a difference can be made. This summer I volunteered in a neonatal hospital in India where I noticed a lack of the same commodities we take for granted in the US. Inside the hospital there needed to be special filters throughout the water system since it's hard to get clean water in India. Many of the patients would be children who were malnourished because of their poverty stricken families. It was the hospital's responsibility to try and save every life and help the families. In some cases, families became indifferent towards the death of their children since in most cases it would actually be seen as a positive occurrence; it would be seen as another burden they didn't have to worry about. Not only does this portray the ailing position of other countries outside of America, but it also shows how we are normally inclined to take things for granted. Society should take on the responsibility to help others that are in need. There are many luxuries and common necessities that we don't appreciate which others pray to have. It takes many years for a person to progress from being ignorant or innocent to become mature and realize their bigger role in society. By grasping this at an early age, I would be able to have a bigger impact on a community and serve a bigger purpose. In essence, my experience in the hospital gave me a more humble view of the world and a greater appreciation towards "trivial" things in society.
Research allows an individual to venture their minds into unknown aspects of the world giving a unique perspective towards society. In turn, a person can not only be intrigued by this data but also help the world uncover facts that were previously unidentified. In my school, a program called Waksman allows the students to conduct research and provides an opportunity to utilize unique tools to study certain organisms. The information students find from these organisms will be submitted into the international sequence database for other scientists to use, since the sequences of these genes have never been determined before. This program enables students, teachers, and scientists to work together and utilize concepts of molecular biology and genetic engineering to gain an understanding of "the bigger picture". My presence in this program allowed me to acquire a scientific work standard and further foster my interest in science. After volunteering at a hospital in India and performing my own independent research at Waksman, I was able to ascertain a magnanimous outlook on society while developing a sincere work habit.
"Over the years I volunteered in different locations which have helped me see the world in its brightest and darkest moments." Since you have mentioned that you have seen these moments, why don't you depict one of these moments in your essay to make it more " attractive"? I feel the essay might be a little bit plain. And the connection and transition between your volutery experience and your academic program seems somewhat confusing. You shifted the topic too quickly .
Hope my advice would be helpful:-)
I didn't make my point clear. I mean maybe you can depict the scene you see in the hospital in a more literary and appealing way. Also, if you really want to talk both volunteering and research in your essay, you can add transition like" research made me view the 'trivial' aspects of the world, too (just my draft idea, not necessarily good). But I do think you can focus on either volunteering or research.It will make your essay more impressive and make your points stand out.
