When looking and applying to colleges
As I was applying to colleges in my senior year of high school I thought I had found a perfect match at UNCW. During my two years spent here, I have met many great lifelong friends and
gained many new experiences that I would not trade for the world. However,....
At UNCW I have found a lack of academic challenges. I personally do my best when I am challenged in the classroom and I have not found that challenge here. Many of the students I meet here chose to attend UNCW solely to party and go to the beach. Honestly those are major reasons that I choose to attend UNCW. Since my freshman year I have matured a lot and my priorities have changed greatly. While I have realized that academics are not the top priority for many of the students here, and they seem to do the bare minimum to get by.
Rephrase this. Do not talk down on your school or the students at your school. Admission don't want to hear this. It makes them perceive you in a negative manner, and they surely won't admit someone who thinks like this.
I believe UNC offers...
UNC has been ranked as one of the top public university for its entire existence and is even considered a "Public Ivy" school. Being located in Research Triangle Park and having such a high reputation, Carolina has many advantages for networking and finding internships that can lead me into my future career.
Instead of sucking up to the school, talk about their programs offering, etc.