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I am the four hundred meters athlete in my freshman and sophomore years. To me, stamina, strength, willpower and concentration are the four essential components in racing the four hundred meters. The race is not long or short, but I have to use my whole concentration into the race. However, it's not only a race, but a higher level training of abiding willpower and strength. Although the training of an athlete is sometimes toilsome and we wanted to give up, we have to endure and overcome. By overcoming the adversities in training, it helps me in persisting to do everything and not giving it up. The race also requires athletes to follow the direction and not getting out of line. Unfortunately, after I got injured from the swimming gala, i stopped my training and started to develop another hobby, which is playing the piano. I benefit a lot from this sport since it gave me a really clear objective in my life.
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