the fact that as a female, I cannot drive past the gates of our residential compound.
-> Woah, really? I have friends from the middle east, and I'm pretty sure ALL of them would be uncomfortable/upset with that statement. Maybe you know the situation over there better than I do, i don't know, but don't you think that women would want to be free, and be able to drive past those gates? Do you want to be stuck to a certain proximity for your whole life? I think you should delete this part, even if that's what you REALLY feel... It's just not right in my opinion...
The mixed reviews that my sandals have received have taught me a valuable lesson: Take ownership of what love you, regardless of what people think.
-> I think you have done a good job showing and not telling until you "showed" with this sentence. I can draw this conclusion without you saying it, so that's a good thing : )
While in Texas, I also got to visit my best friend, Gen. Her reaction to my sandals was just as lukewarm. After hugging and reminiscing
-> This seems a little off topic with the sandals and the overall message of the essay...
With this as my mantra, I been true to my passions and have never been more proud to say: I play the bongos! I speak Chinese! I enjoy GoGurt! I watch Rugrats! I listen to Jazz! I love my Saudi
-> So are you saying that people who speak chinese, eat GoGurt or listen to jazz are like made fun of or something? Sorry, I just don't get it now.
-> Rugrats is awesome and all, but i think they want to see you as a matured young adult.
- I honestly think you have great potential with the topic of your sandals and trip to Saudi Arabia. That's totally awesome.
-So, stick with the topic but i think you might have to write it over, or clean it up a bit more.
GOOD LUCK :))