I wish I could get enough of few hours of sleep.
Umm, that part just seems like awkward wording. Perhaps try "I wish I could function off of few hours of sleep" or something like that.
as theater and volleyball
The "as" seems unneccesary b/c you already have the comma before it. However, you can double check.
In all honesty, I love #2 for the "why yale" question more b/c of the repetition of because and the short sentences. I love the last two sentences there as well. However,
and depth the distributional requirements system offers. Because I see in Yale a globalized environment whose diversity I can yet foster.
this part I'm not really fond of. I see that you are trying to use mature vocabulary and that is great. Esp. b/c you go from short-to long- to short sentences again in that response. However, I find myself a bit unsure of what you are trying to convey in this phrase(s).
Good luck! and please look @ mine if you get the chance!
Out of curiosity, is poisonivy based off the JB song?