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George Washington Honors College Essay/7-year BA MD program.


mystictiger 5 / 11  
Nov 6, 2012   #1
Honest opinions please! Please correct grammar mistakes too! Thanks!

The Honors Program at The George Washington University is one of the best academic programs in this nation where there is a plethora of resources and excellent professional fields of research. It will provide the beginning stage that will lead me toward my goal of becoming a successful physician. The great honors curriculum will help me attain knowledge about the greater world that we live in. It will also mold me as a human as well as an intellectual scholar. I would like to engage in cutting edge research at this institution, which is highly known for its research successes.

Volunteering at many different hospitals and health system organizations, I have gained a broad perspective on many issues. I am able to offer my opinions and give critical advice while still being able to learn from others opinions. This broad perspective has allowed me to excel by understanding other people and being able to work collectively towards a common goal. This program has great volunteer opportunities that will supplement my past volunteer experiences. The George Washington University Honors Program has a wide base of opportunities that will provide me with a path to perceive the world objectively. The Honors program and the 7-year B.A/M.D program are a perfect fit for me as I go on to pursue a career in the medical field. I will be able to complete my education faster and provide the best health care for those that need it. These two programs will help me attain knowledge about the greater world that we live in and will add to my motivation to succeed.

As a child, I have learned the values of approaching life whole-heartedly and being able to pass on my fervor for achievement. These are the values that I will bring to George Washington University's Honors Program and the 7-year B.A/M.D program. True success is when you find your place in society and can make cross-cultural connections with others around you. My experience in the Honors Program will be a great asset that will enable me to make a difference in society and be able to help others around me. I will bring a new perspective to the program enriching its wonderful experience for me, everyone else, and the institution itself. I whole-heartedly want to be a member of the University Honors Program and the 7-year B.A/M.D program because it is a perfect mutually beneficial relationship in which the Program and I will benefit from what we have to offer each other.

ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 672 148  
Nov 6, 2012   #2
If you wrote the prompt we could comment on your work more easily. By the way, I have some suggestions that I hope you find them helpful.

The Honors Program at The George Washington University is one of the best academic programs in this nation where there is a plethora of resources and excellent professional fields of research. It will provide the beginning stage that will lead me toward my goal of becoming a successful physician. The great honors curriculum will help me attain knowledge about the greater world that we live in. It will also mold me as a human as well as an intellectual scholar. I would like to engage in cutting edge research at this institution, which is highly known for its research successes.

I think it is more interesting if you open the introduction with a personal experience through which you could find your interest in "physics". I mean you should talk more about your interests in the introduction rather than the university. It would be better to write about the positive aspects of the university at the final paragraph.

Volunteering at many different hospitals and health system organizations, I have gained a broad perspective on many issues. I am able to offer my opinions and give critical advice while still being able to learn from others opinions.

How could these experiences help you to achieve those mentioned positive things? Write more about your experiences and the things you had to do through those volunteer works. In this way you can clearly convey your idea.

As a child, I have learned the values of approaching life whole-heartedly and being able to pass on my fervor for achievement

how could you learn that? it is not clear enough. Elaborate on this part if it is possible.

others around me

repetition. Use another statement.

U wrote about the positive influences that your experiences may bring to the society, but you did not apparently mention what these experiences are. Write more about them and convince the reader that these experiences are really helplful for the university you are applying to.


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