rip off the essay to shreds.
Rip off means to "steal from." Or if I am overcharged for me bag of cotton candy, like $4 for a stupid bag of cotton candy, I might feel "ripped off." But ripping an essay to shreds... I'll do it! See below. :-)
"One day your life will flash before your eyes. Make sure it's worth watching." That is what my grandfather told me when he handed me his steel ring, just few days before he passed away. ----- beautiful. I love the expression and the way you portrayed this experience.
A comma will be nice here: Anyway, I sported the ring.
hyphen: strong-willed and hard-working
Very good: Now, at the cusp of adulthood...
He
let enabled me to understand ...
The most secure thing in life is death. We are all visiting this wor
ld; someday we'll have to leave this life and maybe start a new one.
...to slide onto my finger.
A gift that I don't need to worry about losing.
it . My grandfather gave me the gift of faith. Part of him lives in my hea
rt, and when I see people wearing a shiny steel ring, I do not envy
it them.
This is one of the best essays ever. Hover your mouse cursor over my username and you'll see that I have corrected thousands of essays, and I honestly think this is one of the best essays ever written by anyone. Congratulations on your great writing ability!
I am going to link some people to this so that they might also benefit from it:
Linking these people to it:
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