'goal scored by Kaka!' - Discuss the significance Georgetown

Q: Discuss the significance to you of the school or summer activity in which you have been most involved.

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"What a world class goal scored by Kaka!" Soccer or Football as known by in many countries around the world has a common theme... Bringing people of all backgrounds together to either rejoice or mourn at the result of a game. Soccer fans become livid, depressed, or exultant at the blow of the whistle in the penalty box.

The moment which marked my passion for soccer was when I was on an empty field with my cousins. One of my cousins had the soccer ball between his legs and did not notice the fact that I was coming behind him to take the ball. As I ran towards him I quickly stole the ball from between his legs and ran from him. The exhilarating rush of adrenaline took over my body and ...(?)

Soccer has always been a part of my life, from the time I was a youth to now. As I played with my uncles and cousins as a child, and later on a high school soccer team, I have always strived to not only help my team win games, but to also improve my skills no matter what it took. Although I did not play soccer my senior year in high school, I was still on the sidelines managing the team and watching them advance in their every move.

This game has enabled me to connect with people in my community. When I talk to someone new

This what I have so far. HELP ME AND I'LL HELP YOU. edit please give me some suggestions!

When your writing an essay, try to envision what the message your trying to get across is. Right now it seems as if you're not sure what that is, or at least that's what I take from reading what you have so far. Maybe try starting broad about your association with soccer, and then narrow done to a specific event as to why it is so significant to you.