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'Going through surgery' - EXPERIENCE THAT HAS AFFECTED YOUR GOALS---SU


Nene101 1 / -  
Feb 4, 2010   #1
Reflect upon a significant challenge, experience, event or person in your life. How has that time or that person changed, affected, or otherwise influenced you and the goals you have?

Going through surgery is a very petrifying situation for one to be in. All the possible outcomes go through your head and you expect the absolute worst. How could such a scary experience end up being one of the greatest moments of your life and something that you know that you would cherish forever.

A few weeks before school would begin for a new year, my senior year, I went into the hospital for a breast biopsy. I was terrified of needles and apparently anesthetic too. But over and over agiain I was reassured by my surgeon and his team that I was in good hands. All I could do was nod my head and smile. But inside I wanted to cry and run. But indeed I had to go through with it, for my health's sake.

After a very successful surgery, I came to realize that a surgeon was what I wanted to be. I wanted to treat patients as well as "repair" them. I have changed my mind plenty of times. But all in all, I have always wanted to take care of people, to make them right again. This experience has showed me that it is not only saying that your patient will have a successful surgery but accomplishing a triumphant surgery.

This experience has also helped me shape my personality as well. Now I see myself as a more openminded person with a lot more confidence in myself and others. I can now say, " I can do it!" and mean it. I've gone through this operation and not only am I healthier then before, but I am also very successful in any and everything that I put my mind to. It has also confirmed to me that I need to be more optimistic about situations that I sometimes find myself in rather than pessimistic.

This experience has influenced my goals because if I had not went through it, I would not have recognized what my true calling was. I am very grateful for such an eye opening event in my life. And I know now that truly "What does not kill me, makes me stronger."
conheomap 3 / 6  
Feb 5, 2010   #2
But over and over again ,
Hope it helps.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Feb 5, 2010   #3
Going through s urgery is a very petrifying situation for one to be in. Look! Look how much more powerful your writing is if we trim away the useless words, the weeds in the garden:

Surgery is petrifying. All the possible... ---- that is powerful writing :-)

It is usually saer in this kind of essay to use the first person perspective:
All the possible outcomes go through my...

End that first paragraph with a question mark. ?

But Inside, I wanted to cry and run, but indeed I had to go through with it, for my health's sake.

:-)
linmark 2 / 328 7  
Feb 13, 2010   #4
I am also very successful in any and everything that I put my mind to.

I can be successful in everything I put my mind to.

because if I had not went through it,

if I had not gone through it OR without it
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Feb 14, 2010   #5
I can be successful in everything I put my mind to.

Yes, good call, A. Smith! I agree that the sentence was a little awkward. "Any and everything" does not quite work. Anything and everything is something people do often say, but it's cliched. I like your way, which is direct and simple. Simple is powerful.


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