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UC Prompt 1- "Great Life"


nishil0 1 / -  
Nov 26, 2009   #1
Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.

The aromas of roadside food caught the air as my father went to school. Through the piles of slums and heaps of broken furniture thrown out of the back of moving cars, mismatched shoes, and other unwanted belongings, my father made his way across town. This was the path he took every day. He was determined to reach school since he knew the importance of education. My father and I have developed similar viewpoints on education. My life has been shaped by my father's life and background, which have been important in developing my own views on life.

By seeing my father's hardships during his education, I have learned that perseverance is essential to reaching any aspirations I may strive for. Day in and day out, working hard will be needed to reach any goal or ambition. I have seen people who have never had the opportunity to go to school. They have to either help support their family or take care of their younger siblings while their parents work. Since I have an opportunity to become educated, I want to take advantage of it. I want to see my window of opportunity widen so I can help those less fortunate people better their lives by through years of education.

I believe that education is a lifelong process. I have therefore taken many advanced courses and even tutored students in math and science to inspire them to continue their education. This educational importance became important to me since it raised my interest in school and sharpened my thinking abilities in addition to helping me navigate through different challenges and obstacles in life. I became more involved and started to work towards my goals which range from helping others to becoming independent. I began to develop into a better individual who can enjoy a so-called "great life." I would like to see my life filled with success and helping the less fortunate achieve success through educational endeavors. I have held many of the same virtues that helped my father strive to obtain a successful career. Throughout my childhood, my father has always emphasized the idea that education is vital in unlocking all possibilities that life has to offer; now this philosophy has become critical to my thought process.

My vision of a "great life" can be achieved in many facets. Expanding on education will provide me with the right challenges to encounter the real world. That viewpoint has become integral to my father-invested beliefs on education. My new perspectives will embark me on a lifelong learning journey into an environment filled with professionals who are well-connected with the academic community. I am looking forward to the flexibility and freedom of college since I will have the opportunity to experience career specific classes. Further schooling will allow me to set my education path and develop into a more educated, hence more successful individual enjoying all aspects of a "great life." In the upcoming years, this education will be important to shape my personality and expand upon my ever-growing knowledge base.
polytag - / 10  
Nov 26, 2009   #2
Since the prompt mentioned "how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations", why not make some reference to your intended major? You sound as if you only live just to study. Your first two paragraphs are very well-written. Your aspirations are evident in the third paragraph but sad to say your last paragraph is unfocused.

In the upcoming years, this education will be important to shape my personality and expand upon my ever-growing knowledge base.

... this education will be important in shaping my personality and expanding my ...


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