and all those who apply to it
Not all who apply are accepted. This is an unnecessary detail anyway.
rare opportunity it is not a rare opportunity to go to college in a city.
Either way the campus provides a
inconvenience convenience to the students.
As UCF offers me many great things, I will add many great things back to the university.This is not meaningful because the word "things" is so ambiguous. Specify the things the school offers and the things you will add.
In today's world, people are moving so fast that they rarely have time to stop and think about the world. People never get a chance to realize the true beauty the world holds or even just figure out their own true beauty.
This is excellent! So, what are the "things" you will add? I think they include a sense of appreciation, stress management, and study skills. These are good "things" to mention, so do not use the word "
things ."