PLEASE HELP ME WITH THIS PROMPT. I had no idea what to write about so i just typed what came to my mind. Harsh criticism plz
Prompt: What matters to you and why?
Well, that's a very broad question. Some days, everything matters to me while on the other days, nothing matters. For example, there are times when I convince myself that the reason of my existence is to savor the delicious taste of food. But there are also times when I'm the philosophically perfect citizen whose ultimate desire is global peace and end of starvation. My priorities in life are not always constant and the things that matter to me change according to those priorities. A disappointing grade on a test might make education matter but disappointed parents might make family matter. Heartwarming notes from peers might make friends matter but heart-rending pictures of starving children might make ending world hunger matter. I'm not ashamed of my fluctuating concerns in life because they exemplify the range of perspectives I carry and my ability to focus on many parts of life at once. But when it comes down to it, what really matters to me is my happiness. When I'm happy, I feel like I'm invincible. Happiness allows me to be a Hercules challenging the Greek gods or a Jew standing up to a Hitler. It allows me to look forward towards the future rather than to ponder over the past. It allows me to appreciate my life and avoid self-deprecation and regrets. So what makes me happy? Everything, like I mentioned above, ranging from gaining knowledge and making my parents proud to hanging out with my friends or helping for a bigger cause. If my family and friends are happy, I'm happy. If I'm fighting for something I believe in and doing something I like, I'm happy. I know I'll be happy when I'm at Stanford because I'll be studying what I wish, how I wish, and where I wish. I will be able to tackle the many priorities in my life at once, giving me the ultimate happiness.
It def needs tweaking but does the idea work?
OMG - I LOVE it!!! it's SUPER unique. who else writes about happiness? and u hit the nail on the head to your personality - tho i dont know u personally, i can infer so much about how you think and who u are. WONDERFUL. i wouldn't change a thing (voice and topic-wise).
I know exactly how you feel, and feel the same although I didn't write about it. Personally, (and it's kind of biased) I think this is a wonderful response.
From the point of view of a college, I don't know how well they will respond to your idea of liking one thing now and then another another time, the way you stressed that. (does that mean he cannot be expected to be passionate about his studies for long enough?). But that's just an opinion, perhaps you could just take a little bit of emphasis off that idea and focus on something else.
Thank you so much!!
alright i'll think about changing that a bit.
well, i think u should stay true to who u are. if that's who u are, then keep it in - the reader can get to know u that way... IMO.