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I really need help starting my UT Austin essay


noori1234 2 / 8  
Dec 17, 2008   #1
I have to write 2 essays. The First one has to be the statement of purpose, and the other has to be a essay about an issue important to me.

1) The statement of purpose will provide an opportunity to explain any extenuating circumstances that you feel could add value to your application.

I do not know where to start...please help.
Also the essay about an issue important to me, i want to write about the dowry system in the Indian culture, since i am a Indian..and i know how it affects the people out there. I am just having a hard time starting it out.
EF_Sean 6 / 3,491  
Dec 18, 2008   #2
Start with your thesis. That is, start by deciding what you want the main point of each essay to be. Then think of various examples and reasons you could give that would support that thesis. If you could do that, and come up with even a rough outline for each essay, you could post those outlines here. That would make it much easier to give you advice.
Joycey 1 / 1  
Dec 18, 2008   #3
Hi, i'm also applying to UT austin. The statement of purpose u mentioned is optional, but the other two are compulsory, you might want to double check before writing them.

compulsory ones:

1. Write an essay in which you tell us about someone who has made an impact on your life and explain how and why this person is important to you.

2. Choose an issue of importance to you - the issue could be personal, school related, local, political or international in scope - and write an essay in which you explain the significance of that issue to yourself, your family, your community or your generation.

Good luck :)
OP noori1234 2 / 8  
Dec 18, 2008   #4
Are the transfer essays different then? this is the link...can u help me? bealonghorn.utexas.edu/transfer/admission/essays/index.html
kim101790 2 / 5  
Dec 18, 2008   #5
Hi,
I don't know if this method will help you but what I usually do before writing an essay is
I make a list of anything that's related to the topic I am going to write about.
Then I group the similar ideas together, at this point i usually
have a direction of where my essay is going.

I hope this will help
good luck:]
Kobe24 5 / 9  
Dec 20, 2008   #6
Perhaps international application essays differ from native application essays and transfer essays
Kikozang - / 14  
Dec 20, 2008   #7
They are the same I think.
I think what your thinking of is a good topic because at least you could be sure your essay won't become one of the cliche 'economic crisis' or 'Obama' essays, no offence to people writing them it's just really hard to stand out when so many people are on about the same thing.

If you know everything about it then start scribling on paper first, it works for me because once I start writing ideas start coming and I go back to refine them later.If you don't know everything about it do some research,that always helps.

I'm writing mine right now!

Good luck!
OP noori1234 2 / 8  
Jan 15, 2009   #8
UT AUSTIN transfer student essay.

PROMPT: Choose an issue of importance to you-the issue could be personal, school related, local, political, or international in scope-and write an essay in which you explain the significance of that issue to yourself, your family, your community, or your generation.

ESSAY: Some people believe in love at first sight, while other people believe that it takes time to love someone. It is hard to form a relationship with someone whom you do not even know. In order to build a strong bond between two people it takes time, patience, and trust. If that relationship goes well then it ends in a marriage. However, there are still some cultures out there that do not allow their children to meet that special someone on their own. Growing up in America, I never thought that this would happen to me. I never thought that my parents would not even allow me the chance to find someone on my own. The idea of having an arranged marriage did not even come to mind, because I knew that an arranged marriage meant that it would be an agreement between two families rather than the couple getting married. It was only my senior year of high school, and my mother started to complain how I was not even engaged yet. Even though we had been living in America for so long, my parents still had that narrow minded mentality of getting girls married at an early age. My mother would repeat the same thing over and over again, about how I will never find a decent husband if I get too old. I ignored everything my mother said, and inside I knew that I would find someone whom I loved. However, I was wrong. As days went by, my parents started to get more serious about me getting married. My mother tried all her best to find someone for me who lived in America, but when my mother would send my picture out to the opposite side, I would either get rejected because of my short stature or my dark skin color. Even with matchmakers involved, nothing was getting accomplished. I was not hurt by all this because I was not ready to get engaged to someone who was willing to get married to me without even knowing me from the inside. Summer was here, and my family had decided to visit our family in Pakistan. I thought to myself that my vacation to Pakistan would get me away from this marriage chaos for a little while. When we went to Pakistan, I met girls who were my age that were either married or engaged. When I would ask them if they had a love marriage, they would all laugh at me. Every day I woke up with a fear inside that my parents would try to find a guy for me here. Before I knew it, I was getting proposals. One day I got a proposal that was from a very nice wealthy family in Pakistan. My parents did not even bother to come ask me if I wanted to get engaged to that guy. I was only allowed to meet him for one hour and that was it. Every time I wanted to speak up and say no, I thought about my parent's reputation and happiness, and then I just squeezed my tears back. Before I knew it I was engaged to a guy that I did not even know. I understand the fact that love can evolve in an arranged marriage, but I believe that everyone should have at least one chance to find someone that they have fallen in love with. Having an arranged marriage is an issue for a lot of girls and guys who live in America. Parents need to understand that being raised in America, children have a whole different mentality. Marriage is not a social arrangement. Marriage is not a business deal. Marriage is the union of two old souls who have finally found each other after an eternity, and this is hard to become possible in an arranged marriage.

PLEASE HELP!! i was thinking if i could get some better vocabulary in here! and is this long enough?
shine lee 1 / 36  
Jan 15, 2009   #9
It's just my suggestion,
First, you should seperate it into some paragraphs, and it would be easier to read.
Second, you should have a thesis statement for this para to make the reader what you want them understand.
Some people believe in love at first sight, while other people believe that it takes time to love someone. It is hard to form a relationship with someone whom you do not even know. In order to build a strong bond between two people it takes time, patience, and trust. If that relationship goes well then it ends in a marriage. However, there are still some cultures out there that do not allow their children to meet that special someone on their own.

..
And this essay is a complaint rather than a essay, you have complained your parents for several times; I don't think adcom will like it.

Last, your essay doen't tell how you resolve your problem, maybe your solution would make your essay more interesting..
Good luck!


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