What qualities or unique characteristics do you possess that would allow you to contribute to the UCF community?
From the time I was a little girl to the present day, I have always been known as a helper and a people lover. I greatly enjoy people of all kinds and getting to know their personalities and how they think. Whenever I see someone in need of help in any form, I always try to see if there is anything I can do to help them. I have a passion for people and will do nearly anything to meet the need of an individual. Even though sometimes I am the new person in a situation, I always strive to make others feel welcome, accepted and appreciated. I delight in encouraging and uplifting people, and I like to set a good example for others to follow. I would be thrilled to be given the opportunity to be a resident assistant in my dorm because I view it as a huge opening to be able to inspire, edify, and motivate other people to be their best. My desired major is speech language pathology because I believe it to be the finest application of my talents and skills. I want a challenging program, but I also want something that will equip me to serve others. Many people have speech problems, and it can be a very frustrating thing for them. I am invigorated at the thought of being able to assist them in one of the most important forms of communication--speech and the formation of words. I realize that this process can be quite daunting and make one feel defeated. But I am determined to encourage and believe in my patients and to help them every step of the way until they are confident in their word formation.
If there has been some obstacle or "bump in the road," in your academic or personal life, please explain the circumstances.
Although I have maintained good grades throughout high school, I still face academic obstacles. I enjoy taking on challenges, and for me, math and writing are two of the biggest challenges I face. Another huge challenge for me is procrastination. To overcome these hurdles, I chose to take Precalculus, AP Literature and Composition, and almost every class this year is an honors class. By doing this, I have already seen a large improvement in my mathematics skills, and taking that math class (versus Business Math) has instilled in me a motivation to succeed, learn, and grow in my academic career. Since beginning the AP Literature and Composition class, I have learned how to read and critically analyze literary works, and my writing (while I believe it can always be improved), has been further refined as well. With so many hard classes and a large work load, I have no time to slack off without risk of failing a class or earning low class scores. This rigorous class schedule has benefitted me in the following ways: it has helped me to almost eliminate entirely my procrastination problem, it has challenged and motivated me to learn and expand my mind, it has given me a genuine appreciation for learning and a love for school, and it has helped to prepare me for my future college academic life as well. While it was not easy to manage my time wisely at first, I have now learned and practiced better time management skills and have been encouraged by my success.
Being given the opportunity to attend the University of Central Florida would thrill me, not just because of the great things that the university would be able to offer me, but also for the opportunities I would be granted to serve my fellow students and the university as a whole.
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Mechanically, only three suggestions: first, make sure when you are making a list to include a comma after every item in the series. For example, "...feel welcome, accepted, and appreciated." Second, avoid starting your sentences with transitory/linking words such as "because," "but," or "and." Third, make sure you are capitalizing only proper nouns and the first words of sentences. For example, "...take Precalculus, AP Literature and Composition..." These shouldn't be capitalized as they are neither.
In regards to content, both pieces are very well crafted, structured, and explained. Good examples are also included in your answers to these prompts. Overall, very nice work.
Best of luck!
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Gloria
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