"Helping at the hospital" - Volunteer Activity - Common App

Hello!
Please provide any feedback on this short response. Thank you very much!

Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below

Every day a new record is begun. There is constantly another file that needs to be pulled or stored, another service that needs to be coded, or another fax to be sent. The medical records section of any hospital is subject to these actions all the time. The year I've spent helping medical records at ___________________ Hospital has made life much more comprehensible to me. Looking at all the work there is and all the patients that need help, made me understand that this is exactly what I want to do. I want to be a part of something that works towards the development of human kind. If anything at all, volunteering at my local hospital has reinforced my idea to serve the community as not just a helper, but as an individual with the ambition to try and make lives better.

I wrote about volunteering at the hospital too! I think your essay is good in a sense that it tells how much helping out at the hospital has changed you in a more indirect way than just stating it blatantly. also, you just talk about paperwork, is that the only thing you do? you write about how you file paperwork, then jump to helping patients, so do you mean paperwork is helping patients, or is there also another job that you do?

Thank you. :)
Well, I didn't really help much with patients directly, so I was kind of implying that paperwork helps patients.