'Hey buddy! Amigo! Tomodachi! ' - Stanford Supplement Roommate essay

All help is appreciated, i do not think it is very good so tell me what you think! no matter how harsh!

Hey buddy! Amigo! Tomodachi!

If my current roommate (brother) was to describe me, he would not know what to say. One week I can work hard on developing a website. The week after that I can sit for hours trying to build a lie detector out of spare electrical parts I would rip out of a board lying near a trashcan and directions found online.

Even though some of my interests tend to fluctuate; I also have some interests that remain steady throughout the year. For example, my adoration for Japanese anime and manga is currently one of the longest hobbies I have ever held onto, approximately 5 years. I watch my anime and read my manga with exact punctuality. Every season or so the times may change but I am telling you, I stick to those times as if my life depended on it. My commitment toward these shows can be represented through my willingness to wake up in the wee hours of the morning just to watch the shows. There may be a hint of ecstasy and entertainment value in the shows and comics I read, but there is also a lot of educational value. The shows allow me to take part and learn the Japanese language in a way that no teacher or textbook can teach.

Throughout my journey in the world of Japanese anime and manga I developed a keen interest in technology and the internet. I love taking part in online forum discussions that major in anything from memes, Japan, overclocking, and just technology in general. One of my greatest aspirations involves building a room that consists of a myriad of touch screens that control various aspects of a house or can be use for entertainment value such as video games that involve a person in 3D space. Although currently I have no monetary support for my large expanse of ideas I would like to make these ideas come to fruition in our living space and hopefully we can both work on such projects.

On a closing note, no matter how different we may be I hope that we can create a friendship that lasts throughout the ages.

possibly: in a way that any teacher or textbook could teach
Otherwise,I really like your essay!good luck:)
Could you possibly read my Bard Supplement?

I really like this answer. It is both personal and lively, which is exactly the purpose of this prompt. Would you rather try to be more casual? That might help a little. Otherwise this is great.

thank you both for your feedback

I will be happy to return the favor for both of you