Hi guys, this is my personal statement for UC. I am such a horrible essay writer that writing personal statements is giving me a nightmare every night. I would love to get any kinds of opinions. If it is really bad, please enlighten me
TOPIC Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud, and how does it relate to the person you are?
I immigrated to the United States with my family at the age of twelve. The challenge I had to face was a double-edged sword; either I gave up and knelt to a dramatic change, or I accepted the challenge to adapt and achieve my American dream. Of these two options, I chose the latter. My mom, who worked hard as a night shift nurse, gave me the determination not to give in to bad influences. Therefore, I always had to be responsible for myself in school and outside.
The challenge of learning a new language for a boy who did not have knowledge in English was arduous. My math class was taught in English, so were my history, science, and even P.E. I decided to think positively that it would soon change my life. After years of a tacit challenge, I was able to excel in exams and graduate from high school one year earlier by putting in extra effort.
There was a social difference, the difference set not by others, but myself. My self-esteem was so low that I encaged myself in a prison because I thought everyone would make fun of the difference I had. However, as I overcame the language barrier, I found myself being more confident. In 10th grade, I took one step outside my comfort zone and initiated conversations with my peers. It was hard at first, but as time passed, I made some friends and ended up joining to the Varsity Volleyball Team with their encouragement. This extracurricular activity gave me so much pleasure. The escape from a self made prison was an indescribable accomplishment for me. I learned to be more confident and adventurous.
After graduating high school, I went backpacking through North America and Asia. Every time I was afraid of going somewhere new, I reminded myself that I could do it. As an immigrant, I was able to adjust myself to a sudden change and it has been my strong point. During the trip, I met people who shared different cultural aspects. I frankly approached them and they welcomed me in return. It once again taught me the value of the relationship with people and ability to control myself in different environments.
Now, as an honor student and a Math Lab Assistant at Santa Rosa Junior College, I encounter many students whose first language is not English. As a first generation of immigrant, I know the hardship that they are going through. I always ask them first if they need extra help or whenever they have a puzzled look. I feel achieved when they appreciate me for the help. Furthermore, it encourages me to be a more useful person who can contribute to society.
My adventure at Santa Rosa Junior College is coming to an end, as I will be travelling fourteen countries in South America for six months next spring. I have learned to respect, empathize, challenge and overcome. I am sure I can safely backpack through South America with skills that I have acquired over the past few years. I will come back stronger and face another life changing adventure at the University of California.