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My high motivation - UC transfer- Personal Quality I value the most


jacky7689 1 / -  
Nov 28, 2009   #1
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The personal quality that I value most is my high motivation. I am not only agile to opportunities, but also willing to challenge. To be head of the crowd, I targeted Jianguo High school- the best high school in my country- as my only choice. Among all junior high school graduates, only top 1% in entrance exam is able to enter Jianguo High School. With that target in mind, I analyzed my situation, and developed a strategy to reach my goal. Finally, I got a score that rated top 1% of all graduates and entered my dream school.

Jianguo High School affords me not only intellectual stimulation but also opportunities. In my high school life, I was active in different kind of activities. I served as the head of Art and Culture Department of the student government. As a section leader, I edit the club handbook which published more than 1400 copies, and I also in charge of the graduation gift to graduates. I am also the co-organizer of the school celebration party, which has more than 3000 participants. Although taking the responsibility is extremely time consuming, I learned how to work under pressure with short deadline and thus did well on my college entrance exam, enrolled by the Commerce College of NCCU, which is also one of the best in my country.

Since entering the university, I continue to push myself to a higher place. I was selected in a stringent recruitment process from all students in Commerce College as a Commerce Ambassador, responsible to promote Commerce College in campus tour, college affairs and other occasions. In my term of College Ambassador, I was voted as the Chief of Information Section. My job content is design material we present and maintain the webpage. To make our material better, I did lots of research and thus give me a wilder view on the realm of business.

As I moved into my junior year, I was chose to be a Student Ambassador of the Office of International Affairs. Although both needs good communication skills and team work ability, Student Ambassadors mainly deal with international students, thus requires more on intercultural ability and language skills. My involvement gives me new prospective to exotic cultures. Though I have been to many countries, organizing activities is a challenge because it requires more attentive to specific details. For example, preparing food for international students matters. I have to learn more about taboos in respective cultures and try to fulfill their needs. Being a student ambassador make me more tolerate to different cultures and more adapted to diversity environments.

In NCCU, I not only participate in wild range of extracurricular activities, but also devote myself to specialized field. I worked in the computer center as a consultant, helping users solving their technical problems. Outside of school, I took an internship in Microsoft Campus Program and got various kinds of certifications such as Securities Specialist, Senior Securities Specialist, Securities Investment Trust and Consulting Professionals, Futures Specialist and Proficiency Test for Bank Internal Control and Audit.

My motivation led me to gain those experiences and those experiences led me to the place where I am now. However, to reach my full potential, I am trying to go to my next step - searching for challenge outside my country. I had been privileged to be an exchange student to Cologne University. However, I think I will gain more while pursuing a degree in the top US universities. Essentially, a degree from UC is the key step stone leads me to my goals.
bilibala 3 / 10  
Nov 28, 2009   #2
"Among all junior high school graduates, only top 1% in entrance exam is able to enter Jianguo High School. "

suggestion:
"Among all junior high school graduates, only (one percent of the students among the highest score) from the entrance exam (are) able to enter Jianguo High School. "
shaq896 2 / 8  
Nov 28, 2009   #3
"Essentially, a degree from UC is the key stepPING stone THAT WILL LEAD me to my goals."
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Nov 29, 2009   #4
People often write "wide range," so "wild range" makes it seem like you have a misunderstanding:
In NCCU, I not only participate in wide range of... extracurricular activities, but also devote myself to a specialized field: I worked in the computer center as a consultant, helping users solving their technical problems. -----? I added a colon to that sentence above; a colon works well there.


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