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triplet 2 / 6  
Dec 21, 2010   #1
Please read and critique these short answer questions, and I return the favor. Thank you in advance.

What in particular about Yale has influenced your decision to apply?
With over 2000 classes available, my chances to quench my curiosity are endless. I have a passion to learn and explore what I do not know YET. Yale is the best institution to provide me with the resources to do so. Why? Because with a small student to instructor ratio, I will be able to closely interact with professors to better my skills. Because I can gain medical knowledge with the SMDEP. Because I can implement my skills in a world that needs medicinal recovery and healing.

1) What would you do with a free afternoon tomorrow?
The High Museum continuously hosts new art exhibitions that I wish to view, especially the current one featuring DalĂ­, the master of artistic illusions.

2) Recall a compliment you received that you especially value. What was it? From whom did it come?
"You're Tiffany? I've heard great things about you." --AP Literature teacher

3) If you could witness one moment in history, what would it be and why?

1935: Mother Theresa was allowed to leave the Loreto convent; this event was a break in convention that served as a stepping stone for worldwide impact.

4) What do you wish you were better at being or doing?

Painting is a means of expression that describes what mere words cannot, and therefore, I wish that I was able to piece together the hues and shapes in order to depict this.

Jonika 4 / 10  
Dec 21, 2010   #2
With over 2000 classes available, my chances to quench my curiosity are endless. I have a passion to learn and explore what I do not know YET. Yale is the best institution to provide me with the resources to do so. Why? Because with a small student to instructor ratio, I will be able to closely interact with professors to better my skills. Because I can gain medical knowledge with the SMDEP. Because I can implement my skills in a world that needs medicinal recovery and healing.

I can understand why you structured the end in this way, but too me, it sounds to choppy and repetitive. I would work on this part.

Here's mine. Comments are greatly appreciated.
OP triplet 2 / 6  
Dec 21, 2010   #3
okay, thank you! I will reword it
Gillatorby 1 / 11  
Dec 21, 2010   #4
4) What do you wish you were better at being or doing?

Painting is a means of expression that describes what mere words cannot, and therefore, I wish that I was able to piece together the hues and shapes in order to depict this.

What is "this?"

3) If you could witness one moment in history, what would it be and why?

1935: Mother Theresa was allowed to leave the Loreto convent; this event was a break in convention that served as a stepping stone for worldwide impact.

The reason why you would like to witness this event is also quite convoluted.

And with regards to the "Why Yale?" short answer, I actually like the ending. Its quite poetic. However, in the end it should be YOUR decision. You shouldn't blindly take people's suggestions.


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