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Where did Highschool go? I feel as if my high school years passed me by in a blink of an eye


miraheta 5 / 10 1  
Jan 12, 2015   #1
College admissions essay! Any feedback is welcomed. I need to cut down about 60 words and need grammar help. Thank you (:

As you start your college career, what is your primary goal as a student and how have you prepared to meet this goal, how do you plan to succeed, how do you feel you will do at VCU?

It seems to me like just last night i laid anxious in my bed awaiting the exciting first day of high school and now, almost four years later i feel as if my high school years passed me by in a blink of an eye. Although, it felt like the last four years of my life were on fast forward i am certain they equipped me with all the tools necessary to tackle the next chapter of my life: college.

As I get ready to enter college in the fall of 2015 I am already aware of what my major goals are that i plan to accomplish during my college experience. The most important being my desire to major in engineering. I plan to gain as much knowledge and experiences that will aid me in becoming the best engineer and professional I can be.

For the last four years my high school life has been filled with pre-engineering, math, and science. Because i attend an engineering specialty center I have taken rigorous math and science AP courses that have foreshadowed a little of what I am expected to tackle in college. Besides a rigorous academic schedule, in September of my junior year i began working a part time job that challenged me further. Working and average of 28 hours a week and balancing some of the toughest classes i have ever taken I have gained extraordinary time management skills and become more responsible. Working and attending school was not easy but I feel i can implement the skills I have gained to help me stay focused in college as I continue growing as a young adult. I feel I am fully prepared and equipped to embark on my journey through college. Even though I might need countless cups of coffee along the way there is no doubt in mind that I am capable of succeeding.
southernbelle 2 / 3  
Jan 12, 2015   #2
You have good ideas going but they are not really elaborated on. I don't think the first paragraph or the last sentence are really necessary.
dozazgirl 1 / 2  
Jan 12, 2015   #3
I am already aware of what my major goals are that i plan to accomplish during my college experience. - You're basically saying the same thing twice. Having goals is the same as planning to accomplish something.

You're missing quite a few commas. If you have a dependent clause (sentence that can't be on it's own), you need to have a comma with it. Example: As I get ready to enter college in the fall of 2015, ...

Overall, it seems pretty good. Oh, and make sure to capitalize your i's.


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