"Home Is Where the Grillpocalypse Is" ; why Uchicago essay

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Dec 8, 2012 #1

Question 1. How does the University of Chicago, as you know it now, satisfy your desire for a particular kind of learning, community, and future? Please address with some specificity your own wishes and how they relate to UChicago.

Respond to Question 1 by writing a paragraph or two for each question.

this is first draft. please review this. should I be more specific about uchicago ? any help will be appreciated.

"Home Is Where the Grillpocalypse Is" - the title of the mail stood out in my inbox a month ago. It struck that hidden cord of desire in my heart which immediately told me "I want to be at this place." I am a person of simple tastes, indulge in simple activities and lead a simple life. I don't need extreme sophistication at cost of losing the enjoyment and admiration for life. So reading the brochure from UChicago, Everything from the supplemental essay questions to the description of the Housing system oozes creativity and difference, the qualities I strive for.

But behind this candidness lies rigor of an excellent academic experience, which challenges the conventional and let people like me to engage in research in company of brilliant scholars. With a low student to faculty ratio, I feel assured of receiving help each time I would need it. "Core" will sensitize my being towards the problems of modern society while the major will give me perfection in my field of study - "computer science". I envision myself to be a part of Argonne National Laboratory or Computation Institute, working alongside Professor Yali Amit on his machine learning projects or holding events at CS Student Activities Committee. UChicago will provide me with a firm foundation in mechanics of Computer science and how I can levitate it for my career ahead - be it grad school or job in a firm.

Not only do academics, but campus life also matters. With so many options to choose from, the Housing System makes me crave for UChicago. Nowhere else could I find a more vibrant and dynamic living community, with strong ties inside a house and hundreds of strands of activities that bind them together. Staying 7485 miles away from home for four years, which you haven't left for more than four weeks requires strong commitments and an assurance of acceptance into a completely new culture. At University of Chicago, I firmly believe I will find that and much more - making it a perfect place to call my home.

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Dec 8, 2012 #2

"Home Is Where the Grillpocalypse Is" - the title of the mail stood out in my inbox a month ago. It struck that hidden cord of desire in my heart which immediately told me "I want to be at this place."

I have no idea what a grillpocalypse is. How did that phrase immediately make you want to attend UChicago?

I am a person of simple tastes, indulge in simple activities and lead a simple life. I don't need extreme sophistication at cost of losing the enjoyment and admiration for life.

Are you implying that UChicago is not sophisticated? What are simple tastes and activities? What does your simple life look like?

So reading the brochure from UChicago, (Take that out) Everything from the supplemental essay questions to the description of the h ousing system oozes creativity and originality, qualities I strive for.

Why do you strive for those things?

But behind this candidness lies the rigor of an excellent academic experience, which challenges the conventional and lets people like me engage in research in the company of brilliant scholars.

If you lead a simple life, why does such academic rigor interest you?

With a low student to faculty ratio, I feel assured of receiving help whenever I needed it .

UChicago will provide me with a firm foundation in the mechanics of Computer S cience and teach me to use my knowledge in graduate school or a job in a firm.

Lots of colleges have Computer Science programs. What about UChicago's program is unique? Why do you want to work at those labs or with that professor?

C ampus life also matters. With so many options to choose from, the Housing System makes me crave for UChicago.

Why do the housing options appeal to you so much?

Staying 7485 miles away from my home for four years, which I haven't left for more than four weeks, requires strong commitment and an assurance of acceptance. At the University of Chicago, I firmly believe I will find that and much more - making it a perfect place to call my home.

Where do you live? What about UChicago will make it more welcoming than another university?

Overall, I like your writing style but the essay sounds a little vague right now.