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Housework; MIT App /Pleasure Activity


linting2012 10 / 78 18  
Dec 26, 2012   #1
Hi guys, I have two essay prepared for the MIT pleasure Essay. Can you please tell me which essay is better?

We know you lead a busy life, full of activities, many of which are required of you. Tell us about something you do for the pleasure of it. (*)(100 words or fewer)

First one:

Doing housework is definitely not pleasurable, but I enjoy it. Watching my parent's tired back and gloomy face, I know that managing a business is hard. However every time my father came home he would always squeeze out a little smile and reassure me: "everything will be alright". I love my parents and I yearn to help. However they want me to focus on my studies, so I decided to do what I can: housework. Now, when I see my parents' joy as they return to a cleaned home, I can't help but enjoy this boring and never ending work.

*This was during High School. I start working after graduation.

Second one:

Running the X-Acto knife meticulously down the center of the cutting line and waiting patiently until the glue between two small pieces of paper dried, I came to love this craft. This is a craft of creation, where every incision and gluing give life to an idea. This is a craft of great dedication, where a simple error of deviating 1mm from the cutting line could affect the integrity of the work. This is also a craft of mathematics, where geometric equation is your best friend when dissecting the complex polygon. This is Pepakura*.

*Papercraft in Japanese

thank you all so very much

MiaB 8 / 25  
Dec 26, 2012   #2
Both ideas are really original !
However, I think I prefer the 2nd one. I mean, if I was working on a admission office and reading this; I would probably love to know more about it.

+ it shows precision and hand-work qualities. And, the first sentence is really catchy !
dnx2000 5 / 14 3  
Dec 26, 2012   #3
I really liked the second one. Are you actually going to have the * as a reference?
Perhaps you could say: "This is Pepakura - (a) Japanese papercraft." so that you don't interrupt the flow of you response, although it doesn't really matter.

(Btw I thought it was called Origami)
Good luck with your application, oh and if you're interested, I have one MIT essay uploaded as well.
OP linting2012 10 / 78 18  
Dec 26, 2012   #4
Thank you all very much.
@dnx2000: I am actually the last comment on your MIT essay, it is very interesting. BTW I definitely going to change the *, since it makes the essay a little less "flowy"

@MIab: Thank you very much. I really like papercraft, but I feel that helping my parents actually revealed more about me. What do you think?

Does anyone has other opinions? What do you guy think about this corrected version?

Running the X-Acto knife meticulously down the center of the cutting line and waiting patiently until the glue between two small pieces of paper dried, I came to love this craft. This is a craft of creation, where every incision and gluing give life to an idea. This is a craft of great dedication, where a simple error of deviating 1mm from the cutting line could affect the integrity of the work. This is also a craft of mathematics, where geometric equation is your best friend when dissecting the complex polygon. This is Pepakura - or in English, Papercraft.

Besides guys, I made an craft from scratch : youtube.com/watch?v=UxrElUT2SpE

how can I incorporate this in the essay? Or should I just leave it in the MIT invention section?
dnx2000 5 / 14 3  
Dec 26, 2012   #5
Oh, sorry about that, I can't keep up with all the usernames :P
In that case, thanks a lot!


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