In an essay of 300 words or less, explain to us your decision to apply for transfer to the University of Illinois.Puzzle
After researching various universities thoroughly, I am confident that I would fit perfectly as a puzzle piece that complements the masterpiece of UIUC. UIUC offers what I expect from an ideal university: an excellent academic environment and diversified programs ongoing.
From an early age, I have aspired to succeed as an engineer. I enjoy conducting experiments and research, as I believe that knowledge will only be handy when put into practice. With over 1,900 research projects progressing at the College of Engineering, UIUC is one of the best known research institutions in the United States. Its wide variety of research activities would allow me to further explore engineering in-depth and gain valuable experience. By immersing myself at research centers such as CSAR and ATREL, I expect to equip myself with better abilities and bring innovative technologies from the university into the real world.
I would also like to partake in the diversified programs offered by UIUC. By joining programs such as Human Connections, I expect broadening my knowledge and perspective. I have always appreciated world history and culture as I think it is the differences in cultures that make the world more colorful. As an international student from Malaysia, I want to meet with others from different walks of life and share my perspective and thinking in UIUC. I believe that by embracing different cultures and perspectives, I could grow into a better individual.
UIUC is simply a masterpiece. With everything that it has to offer, including a top notch engineering program and diverse student body, I would greatly benefit through its program. My expected contributions to the university will also add to the legacy of UIUC. Like a puzzle piece, I would make the perfect fit into UIUC and be honored to be a part of the masterpiece.Please help me with this essay. This is one of my top choice schools which I really hope to get in.. (although it's competitive -.-)
1. Are the supporting details specific and strong enough?
2. The word limit is 300 but my essay is 311.. Could anyone help me to cut it down a little? I'm actually thinking whether should I talk JUST about the first point (academic environment)
3. Is it ok to use acronym? Like UIUC instead of University of Illinois Urbana Champaign.. the full name takes a lot of space
4. Please help me with my grammar, essay structure etc