"The bond I have with my mother is what is important to me" i think you should rephrase that sentence, it sounds weird to me.
"overcoming my depression and many more tribulations in my life." Because you are talking about something important for you, it would be good to give more short examples of that tribulations of your mother in your life.
As you are talking about your relationship with your mother, i think you should try to give more feelings to your essay.
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This does not respond to the question. Sure the bond with any parent is important to a child. Most specially one as sick as you were at the time. However, that relationship did not progress beyond the hospital. There is no sense of growth as a person both mentally, morally, and socially, that would justify the importance of your parental bond. Instead, this essay proves that you are a weak person who just may not be a qualified candidate for college. The weakness in this essay comes from the same topic that should have been its strength, the parental bond. What this essay says is that you are incapable of adjusting to life and, when at your weakest point, you will not be able to complete your studies and your mommy will have to come fetch you from wherever it is that you are incapable of adjusting. This is not the image that you want to portray with the reviewer.