What is important to you? And why? (250 words)
"The most important thing to me is family. This is because family members are the people that a person can trust the most in their life. Just as a tall and mighty building will need a strong foundation, I need my family as a foundation for me to build upon and achieve my goals. I believe that behind every successful person there is a lot of people behind the scene who is responsible for their success. I am very reliant on my family; they are the reason why I am here today. Everything that I have achieved, done or made would never be possible without the people who are unconditionally watching my back ever since I was born. However, I will acknowledge the fact my family is a caring and supporting one; and I am not naive to the fact that it is not the case for everyone. Some grow up in troubled households which push them into a life of crime and let whatever potential they might have to go to waste. Therefore, I believe that a strong and loving family requires stability, a strong sense of belonging in the community, and the willingness to make the world a safer and better place for future generations. Conclusively, the idea of family is a personification of love and caring, an important factor behind a person's future, and is the centerpiece of everything that I hold dear in my heart."
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There is nothing unique about this statement response. The importance of family is one of the most standard application themes for this topic. The reviewer is extremely tired of such expected and cookie cutter responses that the minute they read the word family, they tend to move on to the next applicant. You need to think outside of the box. Consider a response that would be unique yet still aligned with something important to you. That way you give the reviewer a unique perspective of what you consider important and how that important thing has helped you mature and become prepared for college. While this essay is acceptable, it does not stand out. If the essay does not stand out, then the reviewer will not remember you application in the end.
Since you have a maximum of 250 words to respond to this essay, do it within 2 paragraphs. That way it will be easier for the reviewer to read the essay and also, make the information more review friendly in case the reviewer decides to look for interesting keywords within your response. The easier it is for him to review your response, the more he may tend to remember what you wrote.
@Holt thank you so much for your comment. I'll work on other things that I value which play important role in my life and my direction.