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'individuality and self-exploration' - Why Oberlin College?


ItsokaytoGaga 15 / 96  
Jan 2, 2012   #1
I think I am crazy. At least I've been told I'm crazy, just about as many times as Norman Bates talks to his dead mother in the movie, "Psycho" (so apt). This is because,

I sit all night long watching Animal Planet and mockumentaries on Dragons. I read till my eyes hurt and cry for sleep. Some books one might find in my bookshelf are World War Z, Rebecca, The Kite Runner, Sophie's World, and The Diary of a Wimpy Kid (you may wonder about my eclectic reading choices). Midnight snacking is my favourite bedtime hobby. Though I cannot go long without losing all the calories I put on by going for my regular jogs and dance class. In addition to being an avid anime buff and a big sci-fi junkie who spends hours reading about possibilities of extra-terrestrial life, I manage to find just about enough time to complete my work. I love studying what I like especially Biology and anything space related, a quality my friends find rather unsettling and to an extent annoying.

Above all, I believe in doing things that I love and that womb chairs are the best spots to catch sleep in. So for all of my above mentioned traits, I feel a deep connection to Oberlin College. After learning about Oberlin, I fervently perused through the college site, devoured the official blog, and stalked Oberlin on every social networking medium possible. The more I learnt about the college, the more I fell in love with its quirky and intellectually charged atmosphere. It excites me to read about ExCo that is yet another learning platform for an Obie which combines fun and learning.

Oberlin celebrates individuality and self-exploration. That's what makes Oberlin my premier college choice. All I dream now is about is about acorns, womb chairs, white squirrels and even the freaky, obese Orange Squirrel that roams the grasses of Tappan Square!

Hi there, I just finished writing this. Please help me edit. Do I show my interest in Oberlin well? Please feel free to offer any advice or suggestions. Thanks a ton for reading!
mendoza123 1 / 8  
Jan 2, 2012   #2
I would suggest that you focus on how you would contribute to Oberlin. Perhaps provide an example of how having a diverse reading choice has helped influence your life and how you would apply that to Oberlin. if you talk about books try to include quotes from your favorite authors. Other than that good essay.

If you could revise my essay i would really appreciate it!
Good Luck!
GraceTaylorWei 12 / 41  
Jan 2, 2012   #3
Hello! First of all I can relate to your weirdness :P However, the way this college phrased their prompt calls for more detail on the college ITSELF. Talk more about programs, areas of interest, etc that are more academically orientated. Don't omit the beginning altogether because it gives u individuality, but perhaps be more succinct and expound where necessary. Also the ending can be made stronger. Don't reiterate too much on your quirks, just be direct.


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