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'an influx of officials' + 'regime in Ghana' - Macalester essays


destinychild 1 / -  
Dec 24, 2011   #1
#1 What factors led you to consider mac? Why do you believe that it may be a good match and what do you believe you can add to the mac community academically and personally

The previous semesters saw an influx of officials from different colleges to my school, UWC-USA. They were all there for the same purpose; to give college presentations, and Macalester was one of the school represented. At this point in time, i was still in doubt as to whether i really wanted to go there, but i was totally convinced by the way in which the school was spoken of by the Macalester school official and by the end of the presentation, i knew where I wanted to spend the next four years of my life. Due to my poor background, i was attracted to the good financial aid packages that the school gives. Having been in UWC-USA, which consists of 200 students from over 80 countries, for about a year and half now, I was really drawn towards the diversity of the school's small population.

I was looking for a place where my talents in poetry, basketball, volleyball, singing and my interests in academic honors club, community service, among others could all be harnessed as i experience a great teaching and learning environment and simultaneously challenge myself in my academics and that is what Macalester offers.

I plan on founding an African Chorus club, drawing from the experience i have gathered from helping with the club's leadership in UWC-USA. I also plan on providing strong leadership skills to the debate community based on my experience as a President of the Writers and Debaters' club in High school and my involvement in all manner of policy debates, parliamentary debate and ethics bowl.

A small private liberal arts college, Macalester offers exactly the kind of majors i have been considering in a very competitive environment. I believe that my possible concentration in Biomedical Science or Economics will be a great learning experience at Macalester because of how small the classes are and the focus given to each student, not forgetting the vast research resources available to all students.

"At Macalester, the diverse student population, brilliant staff and emphasis on global citizenship all inspire us to take risks, be open-minded and be creative when solving problems and finding common ground with our peers." - Emily Houston, junior (Washington, D.C.). This is the description of the kind of school I want to be in, where I am not afraid to discuss freely any topic of my choosing, where I can easily take reasonable risks without fearing to fall and where my spirit of creativity in the arts and sciences will be appreciated and fully nurtured to blossom to what might become the next Shakespeare or Einstein of our time.

#2 Application forms like this often require people to uncomfortably classify their race and ethnicity by checking boxes. Is there anything about your (or your family's) racial or cultural background that you would like us to know that is not addressed elsewhere in your application?

Not long before the end of the military regime in Ghana, a young lawyer of the Fante tribe got engaged to a beautiful young librarian of the Ga tribe and begot 4 children and my father. Around that time also, a geodetic engineer from the Kwahu tribe married a young beautiful seamstress from the Ga tribe and birthed 2 children and my mother.

My father, by tradition, inherits from his mum's side and my mum by tradition inherits from her mum's side also hence are both Gas.

My father used to take my siblings and i to Sekondi, his father's hometown every summer for festivals and my mother also accompanied us to Kwahu to visit extended family relatives for most Christmas holidays. I knew right from infancy that my family's heritage, though strictly Ga, was an interesting mixture of Kwahu and Fante as well. Being surrounded by relatives with different backgrounds thought me about the true nature of diversity and schooled me in three local languages. I now speak Ga, my mother tongue, Fante and Nzema (from the Fante and Kwahu tribe respectively). This passion for languages is reflected in my interest in French and my ability to speak it fluently. It also shows in my interest in English, which explains my playing with words as a favorite pastime and my strong interest in reading. This has given me a deeper understanding of materials taught in class and those i read on my own. I believe i am
cordyceps 3 / 11  
Dec 26, 2011   #2
I like your ideas for the first essay, but the essay sounds a bit choppy for me. I think a better use of transition from sentence to sentence, and from paragraph to paragraph, would help readers (admission officers) get a better feel of your ideas.

Some other suggestions:

A small private liberal arts college, Macalester offers exactly the kind of majors i have been considering in a very competitive environment.

I dont really get what you mean in this sentence. I guess what you meant is "Despite being a small liberal arts college, Macalester offers..."

I would also suggest a conclusion for your 1st essay, where you sum up your answers to "why macalester" and "what you can contribute"

That's all I have. Good luck on your application to Mac :)


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