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Prompt:What are the unique qualities of Emory University, and the specific school(s) to which you are applying (Emory College of Arts and Sciences, Oxford College, or both), that make you want to become part of Emory University? In what ways do you hope to take advantage of the qualities you have identified?
Text:(limit 250 words)
'Inspiraducation'
It is the excitement due to distinctive educational environment and research opportunities for students since first year that keeps me envisioning myself at Emory College of Arts & Sciences, especially in the Interdisciplinary Science Program for Integrating Research into Education. I'm seeking an education at 'a major research institution with the close student-faculty interaction of a small liberal arts college', as descriptions of INSPIRE indicate. INSPIRE exhibits Emory's insights and supports for innovations, which draws me the most. I'm ebullient to have this aim, for I can get devoted promptly in interdisciplinary researches.
For instance, I plan to carry out a research on factors and brain cell functions relating to human cerebral recognition of beauty and clown in my first or second year at Emory. The sense of beauty is mysterious and universal, and for years I have wondered whether a method could be applied to measure this emotion probably determined by biological processes. Both arts and sciences charm me a lot, and for years I have learned in natural sciences. I am curious about the potential interrelations of them. I believe the supposed biological processes would be directed by electro-biological effects on human nerves and influenced by individual distinction. Hence, the research will cover neuroscience, psychology and electromagnetism.
Even though the faith stands that mystery is one nature of arts and sciences, inspiration is another. I am looking forward to prospects of researches as academic treasure hunts, which stimulates my desire in education at Emory College.
Haochuan Wei
(250 words)
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Prompt:What is your favorite ride at the amusement park? How does this reflect your approach to life?
Text: (limit 250 words)
Adventure Uncertain
'Such certainty is beautiful, but uncertainty is more beautiful still.'
View with a Grain of Sand, Wislawa Szymborska
I suffered agitation at the edge of precipice for a bungee jump. 'How can I hold my body when dropping as if on an air crash? Would the landscape change a bit when I look downward? What if a bird occurs when I am rushing with nothing but a nylon?' Much seemed enigmatic while daunting, and I could not balance an appetite for bungee, the mission of a ton, the adventure uncertain.
As I leaped forward, insecure impulses scanned my nerve in a mere flash; then, for the first time, I saw the charming city skyline this way. My eyes got dry by the wind, but I remained goggling. Air flowed into my sleeves, collars, and socks; I was captivated by this sense, literally. As my body was revolving, the scenes varied to skyscrapers in the central business district, cedars in the through greenbelts, blocks in the colorful estates, and Roller Coaster and Ferris Wheel a mile away, along a resolute leaping-out, a dormant stay in suspension, a breathtaking descending, a delicate curve in air, and a buoyant, sweet scent of land.
City was the city, rope was the rope, and air was the air, while life was not just the life; it felt like digressing into an ineffably kaleidoscopic dream, of which I was a devoting active, a willing captive, with an uncertainty divertive, a detachment sensitive.
Haochuan Wei
(250 words)
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intoduction essay two;more than as if on aircrash you could say a better fast drop decription and add unforeseeable destination after it
in essay two you haven't made your perspective clear...I would perhaps add that while bungee jumping everything remained the same,there is the fact that your views change fast..you are in skyscrapers now in minutes you are in cedars another you are in blocks .. maybe you are willing for an adventure this way,such that the changes and fast paced life does not faze you..in bunge jumping you find you are confident to face uncertain adventures
your style and grammar is nice though I would replace charming
i find a sentence in essay one wrong
Both arts and sciences charm me a lot, and for years I have learned in natural sciences...
maybe you should rephrase that.
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