'interdisciplinary nature of the curriculum' - Why the College Of Wooster?

Ok so this is my response to the 500 character essay. I'm 121 characters over (a student told me to put the last bit in haha!) and don't really know if this is the right way to tackle the question? I'm fromthe UK and would be an international student, so should I mention that? Thanks for any help,

Dani

Why are you interested in the College Of Wooster?
Early in my college search I learned that I wanted to study at a liberal arts college. Collaboration between faculty and undergraduate students, a sense of community, and the flexible, interdisciplinary nature of the curriculum are all important to me; Wooster seems to offer all this and more: high quality education and a prestigious independent study program coupled with a diverse community of dedicated people who love to learn all nestled up in rural Ohio. I believe Wooster would enable me to apply myself in ways I haven't before and, ultimately help me find my true niche in the liberal arts. I also love kilts.

The last sentence is quite funny, but it does not seem fit in with the rest of your paragraph. It's good that you first show your knowledge of Wooster, and then relate it to you. I don't think you should mention you're from the UK, unless it's a reason for you to attend Wooster, but otherwise, it will show elsewhere on your application; there's no need to mention it twice. Overall, I think it's a very well written piece!

Could you maybe have a look at mine?

The last bit is really funny and I think it'll definately put a smile on the face if the person reviewing your admission.

As far as I know about College of Wooster, don't they want a 'diverse community of stedent learners', and the fact that you're from the UK and would be an international student does show that right??? You should mention you're an international student and say you'd like to be part of a diverse student body and want to explore a new area/location (basically why you'd rather go to wooster than anywhere in the UK).

I feel your sentences are really long. Although broken up with semi colons and other punctuation, you could put full stops in a few places such as:

Early in my college search I learned that I wanted to study at a liberal arts college. Collaboration between faculty and undergraduate students, a sense of community, and the flexible, interdisciplinary nature of the curriculum are all important to me. Wooster offers all this and more. High quality education and a prestigious independent study program coupled with a diverse community of dedicated people who love to learn all nestled up in rural Ohio.

The short sentences, specially 'Wooster offers all this and more' will stay in the persons mind.

Hope this helped!

Thanks guys!! I'll check yours out now!!