interest in and knowledge of solar energy: what you find intellectually engaging

Prompt: Stanford students are widely known to possess a sense of intellectual vitality. Tell us about an idea or an experience you have had that you find intellectually engaging.

Essay:

"As of today I'm going to start calling you 'the why girl'... you always ask the questions I can't answer!"... My friends say I ask way too many questions but, of a truth, my inquisitiveness comes naturally to me.

Some months ago the El Nińo precipitation patterns revealed that my country would not be having rainfall for an extended period of time. As a result we began to experience a drought. Aside from being annoyed and frustrated with frequent water lock offs, I became bombarded by thoughts and ideas relating to the situation. Why hadn't we instituted more reservoirs of water for periods like this? How does this rainfall pattern thing work? Why don't we have a purification or desalination system?

In the instant of that last question I felt as though my brain had an ampere of electricity channeled through it. Jamaica is surrounded by vast oceans and endowed with incredible weather! I realized we have all the necessary elements to successfully pursue this endeavor - sun and sea water. For many weeks the idea of solar desalination was stuck in my mind. I researched and became familiar with this unique technological process, examining the cost, efficiency and their pros and cons. In the process I also developed a general interest in solar energy. So I spend a lot of time convincing my friends that the sun is a colossal sphere, burning with a temperature of over 15 million degrees, and there is much more we can do with it than just tanning.

From now on, my interest in and knowledge of solar energy can only get hotter, and my ultimate goal is to add Jamaica to the list of countries that have made a great investment in solar desalination.

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ok, i don't know about this essay at all lol
it was one of the most challenging for me. i couldn't come up with an experience so i wrote about an idea.
how do you find it? how well do i answer the question?

Should i omit the last paragraph?

please be expressive and honest! suggestions are VERY welcome!

Nice beginning. :] At first, I thought you were talking to me... then I realized that I'm a guy. :)



Overall, the essay is ok... but I feel that you are just saying this... For example, you might add specific examples of your research experience and maybe explain how you plan on going about your endeavor.

Hi.

Your essay is full of energy and enthusiasm. I was smiling while reading it. lol


I love this line!


FINALLY SOMEONE REALIZE THIS!


...that have made great investments...

G L~

I have to advise against this intro. The essay is supposed to be about an idea or experience, not about the fact that you are inquisitive. Don't be discouraged, though!! This sort of thing is difficult!! Do you see what I mean,... introduce the topic of the essay when you write that intro.


Very cool... this second para can be a good intro para.

Is there a maximum word count for this? If you are allowed to write more, do so, and even consider citing some articles about desalination. You have a great topic!!