I grew up in a normal family with 3 siblings, so my childhood days were fantastic and full of enjoyment. My father had a stable career and my mother is housewife.
My academic record is good as I spent most of the time on studies, but along this I like to hang out with my friends and family and play indoor and out door games. I like to read books. It helps me to enhance my vocabulary and increase my reading ability. I read novels and sometime informative books too. I am also interested in art work. Use to make flowers through ribbons and decorating my room by spraying the walls and stuff like this. Even I am thinking to join any art school along my studies. During my school time I had selected for most of non-academic program like fund raising program and attending seminars. I used to participate in school day functions and perform number of tableau and skits. I believe on social work and want to join organizations who work for others. I am also interested in operating electronic devices like radio, toys, computer, and cell phones. This is the reason I choose engineering.
I have completed my high school studies from Peshawar with very good grades. Through out my school period I used to get at least more than 75% in all the exams. I got A grade in metric. After that I got admission in high school and completed FSc with 81%, A grade. And now I am doing electrical engineering from CECOS University Peshawar. Its my third year and after my engineering I will apply for master.
As the graduates of the Electrical Engineering program are grounded in scientific, mathematical, and technical knowledge through coursework that keeps pace with current relevant technologies; the engineers develop the ability to analyze, synthesize, and design engineering systems through their immersion in the problem-based activities of this research university; and, by means of general education courses, they enhance their ability to communicate and acquire an understanding and appreciation for other areas of human intellectual achievement. On the basis of this principle I want to research on the problem-based activities.
USA is consider to be a head of education for us now a days so I think it is a big opportunity for me to learn form a nation like USA. The main reason for me to study in USA is that I want to make comparison between the engineer of USA and my country. I want to know their method of teaching and studying. I want to work with the engineers at their labs. And to get more about engineering which is not been studied in our country. Along this I wish to meet the people of USA and to know their lifestyle, the way they communicate, their daily routine. I also want to learn some social and art work there. And last but not the least reason for me is to explore the beauty of USA.
This program will be very helpful in developing my leadership skills so that I can join one of the best companies and become a leading employee after I graduate.
Please check my essay and help me if I have done any mistakes!
Is this an essay that contains different parts you want to share with Admission Officers?
Personally, I found it a little too casual in that you have shown few connections between different topics, and the wording is colloquial as well...
I think a more cohesive essay will be more impressive.
Hope it helps~