Everyone belongs to many different communities and/or groups defined by (among other things) shared geography, religion, ethnicity, income, cuisine, interest, race, ideology, or intellectual heritage. Choose one of the communities to which you belong, and describe that community and your place within it. Limit is 300 words:
Ok, I've begun writing this and rewriting the beginning- and I don't know if I should use it, use a different version, or scrap it and start from the beginning??? I could use some advice- this is the very first part.
"Lets open our Bibles to Romans 1,"
As soon as those words were spoken my sister and I exchanged glances, each of us stifling a collective groan, both already knowing how the bible study would end- a private chat with the pastor, and a few phone calls between parents.
When those opening words were quickly followed up by, "to begin our next unit on Homosexuality in the New Testament," my fingers went on autopilot, pens clicked all around the room, I opened three new browsers on my laptop, set my phasers from stun to kill, while bringing up a few .edu articles, and plastering a placid smile on my face. The Internet was my weapon, laden with spikes and snares that took on the form of logic and science in the real world, and my calm disposition was my armor.
Do you like it? Is it to cliche? I could use other scenarios- there's one in Ephesians about women being submissive that we've had plenty of lessons on?
It's definitely an attention grabber. I like it and I think it's fine the way it is, but if you want to make it even more exciting, I suggest you start with the phrase "The Internet was my weapon, laden with spikes and snares that took on the form of logic and science in the real world, and my calm disposition was my armor" and then backtrack to your thoughts about the Bible lesson. That really throws the reader into it and keeps them engaged.
