Wow, this essay really amazes me with your creative approach. :) I love it, and hopefully the admissions will like it too.
I think back to my high school English class when I read Salman Rushdie's East, West
Hmm.. so what was it that made you think about that book? It is implied by the East vs West thing, but it would be better with an explanation.
A point was raised...wait - I didn't agree with that at all! A heated (but good-natured, of course) debate ensues, and I leave the class more insightful, informed, and slightly more defensive than I first went in.
Can you elaborate more on the "point" (I know you intentionally left that part out, but it would be better with a detail)? And I hope you explain more about the "defensive" part.
My roommate is playing music on maximum volume, and I can't concentrate because my favourite song is onbecause she is playing my favorite song
the campus is gorgeous, the classes are stimulating, yes I'm eating my vegetables, and not to worry because I'll be going to bed soon
and hours went by without us even realizing ithours go by
(since everything else is in present tense)
This reminds me of my friend who went to Swarthmore.. :)
Would you do me another favor of looking at my essay? thanks.