a friend I met in the provincial olympiad of informatics, won gold medal in Informatics and would likely be presented for the International Olympiad of Informatics (IOI). I was happy for her, but I couldn't deny my own feeling that I was jealous.
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Always capitalize event titles- ... Olympiad of Informatics... presented for the International Olympiad of Informatics
competition .
I couldn't deny my jealous feelings.My chance to present my country in the IOI was vanished by two cups of coffee that I drank before the provincial selection.
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My chance to represent my country in the IOI vanished because of two cups of coffee...
The coffee made my heart beated too fast, thus I couldn't concentrate on the problem sets.
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so I could not...
All my effort, my sleep hours that I dedicated forsolving problems in online judges, classes that I skipped for training, became useless. The coffee also wept away the hope of the whole civitas academica of my school to see me getting a medal in the national olympiad.
- All my
efforts ,
lost sleep hours that I dedicated to problem solving with... the coffee also
swept away..
For Stacia, minor physical disturbance as I endured won't be a problem, she'd been too experienced. She went to Petra, an expensive private school in the capital city of our province, which had a very good olympiad preparation program. She had won a prestigious national programming contest in 9th grade; she'd probably learned programming in elementary school and had robotic courses since kindergarten.
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Stacia would not have been disturbed by the minor inconvenience of 2 cups of coffee like I was. She was too experienced.She had won a prestigious national programming contest in 9th grade; she'd
-... contest
in the 9th...
she truly deserve the medal.
- truly deserve
d the...
She prepared herself much better than I; she had been trained for years,while I only had less than three months. I just want to have a chance to prepare myself better, so I can achieve higher.
- she had been trained for years
. While I ...
I just wanted to have... so I could. .. achieve higher
goals .
my chance of presenting my country in the IOI gone forever.
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my chance to represent ... was gone...There's nothing I can do for it, nothing I can do to relieve the pain and jealousy I felt. I have to let it go. But I'm not going to let go my passion in compute r and my chance to be a world-class computer engineer in the future.
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I can do about it, let go of my passion for computers.. .
me sure to be engaged in this field in my entire life ;
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makes me sure that I will be engaged in this field my entire life.As for now, I study my friend's computer science college lecture from Nanyang Technological University and enroll myself in HarvardX online course, while watching Stacia's progress towards the IOI.
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and enrolled myself in theThese minor corrections should help polish your essay :-) You related a very interesting and engaging story. Congratulations on achieving that :-)